All Comments on 'Elli's First Time'

Excellent....You got me all wet and Horny and waiting for the 2nd chapter. As I love saying "Don't stop baby".

Kelli

I could smell elli's orgasm and wish it were real. very good job, not many people can pull off first person perspective very well but you have!

I felt like I was there. You must continue with several more chapters.

Very hot, sensious, can not wait for ch 2 and beyond.

...if this is the summer of her 18th year, her age is 17. Work it out. Freddy

First person is always difficult to write in you have succeded in writing a great story.

This is your first story in 1st person? Well, count it a success. You should do more. Off to read Ch. 02.

omg this is awsome. i am so hot and wet right now. you are an awsome writer. you should write in first person more often.

Excellent story, short, sexy & erotic. Can't wait to read the next installments.

The use of first person worked great.