All Comments on 'Can You See Me Now'

A great depiction of the BDSM lifestyle..I loved the story very much..now I need to get my master to allow me to cum as I am burning hot from reading this!

Wonderful, as always, Dave! Can't wait for the next one... soon, please! ;-)

Dani

I almost jumped out of my chair when I saw your latest Valerie! You do such a great job with character building and the sex is awesome as well! I check every day for the latest works of yours. If you ever decide to print fiction I'd love to know where.

That was fun. I like you bringing in characters from other writers. M.Sin is a fun author too. Let the battle of the imaginary subs begin... lol...

I missed her appearance the first time I read this story. Grand Master dweaver999, you are the greatest! Fantastic characters, fantastic pacing, every twist of the plot tops every previous twist until I think you can't go any farther--and then you do. I see Joyce Langston shows up as well. Mag-fucking-nificent! Five, but only because I can't give it 55!

I find it fascinating that authors will praise their 'wonderful' editing without apparently looking critically at what was done. Here are examples of this praiseworthy effort:

Charles' (Charles's) (2)

under garments (undergarments)

under things (underthings)

in the edge (on)

it's collar (its)

up stretched (upstretched)

can (use my) safe word

any time (anytime)

lot less frowns (fewer)

HER HANDS glistened with a sheen of perspiration. HER HANDS began to cool as the air washed over them. HER HANDS were clipped again

work place (workplace)

stop light (stoplight)

strange site (sight)

turn off (turnoff)

cross piece (crosspiece)

While not awful I would not point to this as an exemplary display of editing prowess. Since I found a number of additional areas for consideration then my work, using the same scale must be, at minimum ,beyond extraordinary. I would rate what I have done as competent, thorough, and slightly above average. Before I would release this for publication I would edit one more time!!!! I can only say that I would have more pride than to allow half-finished work to be foisted up as a finished product!!!!