All Comments on 'Halloween'

writing, pacing, characters, storytelling. This is what I look for when I come to this site, and so rarely find. Thank you.

Hi everyone, this is my first story so I would love to hear anyones feedback! Hope to have to second up soon! Khira. I just got this too so please be my friend! I don't know how it works just yet... myspace.com/khirameili

Let your words tell the story! If I need your comments to explain it then it's not worth reading.

. . . from most of the stories I've read on Literotica. I actually had to think a little bit as I read, and I couldn't help but admire the author's creative approach to a familiar tale. Nicely done!

Wonderful story! Write more!

I think that Ms. Nin would approve of your little story Khira. I 2 am a devotee of hers! I think that she would like this tale quite a bit, as it is very much like unto one of her own stories in the way that you have created the character,and told the erotic bits gently but forcefully. Ooh Baby, keep writing. Please. I want more like this! U rock, Dear. I'm throbbing from this, Sugar-Pop! Mmm.