All Comments on 'Out of Retirement Ch. 01'

Great character. More please. Thank you. Roy

I enjoy reading your work, it is always so interesting. I would like to be able to read more of this story, please continue it. Thank You!

I am not sure where this story is going, but will

wait anxiously for your next chapter. My only

small complaint is how super-hero like his background

is and how easily he solved the case. However, you are

still one of the better authors and I give you the

benefit of the doubt to see where you take us.

Always look forward to one of your stories. This is your usual good work.

Wow, another non-stroke piece of fiction like you do so well. I really like these stories of yours. Keep going and I will enjoy the ride, wherever it takes us.

I was wondering how long it would be before an author considered the vapor cloud detonation scenario. Count on you to know your history and apply it intelligently.

Thought this was interesting and well-written. Please continue.

Dinsmore,

Do I detect the beginning of a long running character? It would be good of that I am sure.

Thank you good story. Mike from Texas

Being that Fred was a Jarhead/w a Navy Cross, I can understand why he so easily figured out the whole plot of the enemy--Semper FI

nice series. Keep up the fine work!

That was incredible writing and I loved the how you described the working of the FBI .

Go, Fred, Go!!!

Boyd

It wasn't perfect, but it was good so far and I enjoyed reading it. I think you should see how far you can take it.

if you write one. <BR>

Maybe just a little too brilliant, your Fred - but it <I>is</I> fiction, AND it was a good story.<BR>

Yep - write some more.

Buckle up Winsockie and most others - the banked curves await.<P>

Author - you are appreciated and we knew that you knew that this would be ongoing so please go -- on.

With Very High Regard

how could you miss.give us more.

Since this is chapter 1, are we going to see more of it?? Fred seems to be a very knowledgeable individual.. Fast paced drama kept me glued to it..

I enjoyed your story. It was nice to read about a hero who has gray hair and a IQ above plant life.

I would enjoy reading as much more as you would care to write. Thank you.

Dinsmore, good stories in Literotica are scarse, yet we keep coming back hoping that good authors like you will take pity on us, giving us a good tale. I'm just hoping this is the beginning of a new serial.

Thank you so much for the read.

Stories such as yours are few and far between on this site. I try to catch all you stories as they are put together than most. I this submission you appear to be knowledgeable on the subjects and put forth a great story. Am looking forwand to additional chapters. Retired Reader

Dinsmore--I love your writing but it's been 21 months since your last story--this one. Are you OK? Please don't stop writing!!

or quits, just keeps plugging about, TK U MLJ LV NV

Hell I thought it was good enough for several more chapters, a older James Bond type if you will

I still think its a great story, and still wish you would write more chapters.

until they die, duty, honor, country. TK U MLJ LV NV

Please come back to the story. I would like to read more about Fred.

Great 5 Star story. Good character development for the length; Good twists and turns while at the same time staying believable; I like the touch with the dogs and their breeds. On top of that for a 2 pager short it bult the requisite sense of urgency and then smoothly brought the reader back down without a glitch. I agree with the others, it might be nice to see this character in a novella or even a full length novel.

A nice story with a lot of good development in a small place = the piece was a very good start for a series. Ah well - - "Come Back Shane - Come back!!" LOL

when do we get the next installment?

I am very impressed with your ability to get "SO MUCH" into such a small amount of space. This story had everything, but you also created, defined, and established Fred Stevens as a truly great American character who could be the keystone of one spy thriller after another. WHEW.

I am greedily reading through your library after having sampled liberally. Your non-erotic prose is unfailingly excellent. Pretty sure your background means you are writing about things about which you have significant insight. Wish you would follow up this tale. In fact I wish you would expand a number of your stories. I have a selfish anger with writers I like, why didn't/don't they spin longer yarns and more of them? Don't think I have commented before although I've now read dozens of your pieces--my bad you are certainly worth encouraging.

No bullshit about trying to understand the assholes motives or "feelings". Just finding him and removing him with extreme prejudice.

This character has a lot of legs really hope you continue with him.

More chapters please!!!

Friggin GREAT story! More please. :)

Too close to real life. Power grid was taken down in NC by suspected domestic terrorists dropped power for about half the county in synchronized attack on a couple of substations.

*****That was a cool read. I love stories like this. Thanks for sharing.