All Comments on 'Ranch Girl'

well you could spell "new" correctly, and give earlier warning of the adoption that you do mention.

nice touch, the avoiding shower change when toilet is flushed.

but a cute, low keyed story.

I hate to rate it 75, but it doesn't rate 100. Sorry.

I was distracted by the misused tenses. When it's happening now it's present tense. When it happened last year, it's past tense. You talked about what happened last year as today, then followed with today as today.

Cute story, with a little editing could have been much better.

I enjoyed reading your story. I thought it was pretty well writen. If I have any complaint, it would just be that I wish the adoption had been made clearer sooner. Good job!

The comment with the Pee hole killed it for awhile. And I agree with the others that the adoption should be mentioned earlier.

I really enjoyed this! It's well written, vivid and extremly erotic! Super great job!

This story is no cliff-hanger; though also not a yawner. For a first-time sexual encounter, it lacked the detailed elements of innocense and wonder. Perhaps the writer is older and far too experienced now ~ to remember how it was to see things for the first time. I liked reading it, nonetheless. Ron

Thanks for a believable story. I hope you write more about Jenny and her life on the ranch.

wow!!!! nice but lacked the common story structure for a first time

It has a nice setting and I enjoyed the background, although the adoption did need to be mentioned sooner. It lacked some of the "first time" details that I feel were left out. All in all, not a bad work, just needs work.

I injoyed your story very much.I am not a writer but i do read ALOT of books,so from MY view (from a bookworms view )I love it.

As a first read of another author I enjoyed your story. It rang true for me so I must have overlooked the technical errors/details found by others.

Anyway, I liked it and will read some other works of yours.

You have captured a feeling of authenticity.

Makes me want to wander off I-80 next time I drive through Wyoming! :+))

There's more than prime rib at The Cavalryman in Laramie!!! :+))))))

The first time is so wonderful!!!!!!!!! Then, we learn how to make it better.

Someone spent to much time reading Western comic books.

Great story. Very tingwell written. I can see it unfolding to be a beautiful thing and being exactly as you escribed. Loved reading it. Thanks for writ

Very well written so keep it up.

You developed the relationship with Johnny and Jen real well, I thought. Am hoping for more mating scenes with her eventually ending up with a swollen belly from his big cock sliding up into her pussy. I like impregnation stories and incest stories.

Nice story, the first time might have hurt just a little but when he put his big cock in her virgin pussy, but good still.

Love to hear more of the story, especially when Johnny eventually impregnates Jenny. We know that’s where it’s going. Maybe after some vigorous doggy style sex.

Let us hear some more of Johnny sticking his big hard slimy dick up in her pussy until her belly starts to swell. He is a young virile stud with nuts full of hot seed. She wants it just as bad as he does and we want to know the story of each penetration and the ultimate breeding. How his big hard cock gets his seed deep into her breeding canal, leaving her on the path to motherhood. And how he watches her belly swell, knowing it was his cock and nuts that put her in the family way.