Can't wait to see where it goes
Madam, your a horrible tease! Please continue with your wonderful tell of erotica. Your stories are rich with detail that feeds the erotic soul. I look forward to many more wonderful stories from you.
Really enjoying this and hope you will update again soon.
Tiny quibble - "Bornagold told me I had thirty minutes to wash" - that exact knowledge of the passing of time doesn't seem to fit with the apparent technology of the story, and how does she know she's got 20 minutes left after washing? Just a slightly jarring note in an otherwise seamless narrative.
This one got me going...
some readers might mistake your lack of 'back story' as an unclear plot or unformed 'world'- but I like it... it leaves much to MY imagination, and leaves you room to build the depth and breadth of the world at your leasure. Well done.
Please don't be too obvious in your story line... let's have a surprise or a twist. This is developing nicely.
The Fey characters seeming lack of respect is somewhat annoying unless they're supposed to be the antagonists of the story. If the readers are supposed to dislike them, it's working.
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