All Comments on 'A Tale of Immorality Ch. 06'

to describe how close and yet how far this is from a good story. It lacks soul, passion, any sense of feeling. It is a journey with no sites worth seeing and no destination worth arriving at. Too bad.

I think this woman does as good a job in rationalizing her behavior as any I've read.

Boyd

to describe what I think about this "drama". My only conclusion is that the lady is sick, or at best have a disturbed emotional life.

One intent upon destroyed her husbands as well as her own life. I waited a whole year until my next sex of sexual cheating on my husband. No where in here does it describe any sort of sane rational thinking. In fact, the fact she involves herself in such wanton activities without medical protection or preexamination for STDS and HIV indicates a deep desire to kill herself. She needs to leave George for good and to seek medical help for herself. She doesnt need a counselor or a therapist, she needs a shrink. It would be interesting to know what happened in her life before George that prevented her from having a happy satisfied life as a wife.

<b><i>If I don't cheat on my loving husband, I'll destroy our love.</i>I</b>

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Her husband goes down on her for 30 minutes brings her Her Greast orgasm ever Yet she is STILL cheating?

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<i> But within two minutes I had the most animalistic orgasm I had ever had with him. I'd had those with my lovers

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and this passage

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<i>One night George went down on me. He has the most expert mouth and tongue. He takes at least half an hour to build me up. The teasing drives me crazy. It nudges me up a mountain slope. But it is a slope that doesn't seem to rise at all. Only when he at last pushes me over the edge do I see how dizzyingly high he has taken me. </i>

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Yawn....

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Nothing to see here folks... just another Angiquesophie cheating whore story featuring a amazingly stupid straight husband

that in order to PROVE her loves to george she decides to fuck a horse.

I finally figured you out, angiquesophie.

This chapter at last delivers on the emotional complexity promised earlier. Readers need to get past the cheating itself and enjoy the sometimes silly and vulgar, sometimes tragic emotions of a deeply disturbed woman. Even Anne knows this relationship will end, and not well. How "things fall apart" will be unique I am sure.

I tried to read this story, but I couldn't. The writing style is sort of "jumpy." The constant use of one word sentences (???) and small phrases distracts the reader from sinking into this story. Might I suggest the use of an editor that can teach you how to create a sentence?

Thank you for the story. Please keep writing.

<p>A) I refuse to be judgemental about the moral content of the story until I see where it goes. I recognize that our protagonist is ammoral, perhaps even emotionally disturbed. But that does not mean that the author is either one or the other as well. </p>

<p>B) This story is very well written. Some of the little tricks the author uses have impressed me greatly. This is good work.</p>

<p>C) Criticize the style of writing, criticize the spelling, criticize the current Administration (that I welcome you to do a lot of). But don't criticize the morality of the story until you find out what the moral is. The majority of commenters on this one have made up their minds about the story without having the foggiest notion how it is going to end up. I personally reserve my overall judgement until I see how things turn out.<p>

</p>Waiting until the facts are in isn't a quality that many Lit readers have.</p>

and i have to score it high.

you are Not what one expects to find on LOT. You can write as well as anyone on the site. But yoy subject matter seem choosen to push the Nazi's bottins.

Good for you. i will bet that you spend a lot of time laughing at the idiot comments.

some people write to tease people, some to imform, some to please, you my dear write to antagonize. i have done that a few times but not with you skill. you are an expert. i am jealous.

but my admiration for your ability does not push me to retrurn ti that style of writing.

i will also bet that you could make a decent living with a book writing career. You have the ability to write Literature.

keep going and remember Shakespeare's line of 'Lay on MacDuff and damn'd be he who cries, "Hold enough."

I use the term "pathetic" in its classical sense...not in the faddish sense of today. Full of pathos. How sick that the character had absolutely no self control. So much like today, isn't it? Just do it. (The Nike philosophy)

Yes, she is slefish and thoughtless...but the author is realistic in her writing. As others have said, i love to hate the bitch. Interesting series. Too bad she never got caught. Ah well, nothing is perfect :D

THE BULLET

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Dude what I think you might be missing is that many readers are

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1) impresseed with this writer's talent

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2) frustrated by the fact that in all of her LW stories the Husbands are protrayed as mental morons and or wimps

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take a lok at her story a NEW DELICATE BALANCE OR i BELIEVED IN HER ? or LOVE IS A SILK BLINDFOLD.

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you see you look at each story as independent event. Many readers do not. It is one thing for JPB to write a wank story with the same male/ husband type characters. I think folks HOPE for a better result from this author.

I heartily concur with thebullet. AND I like the style of writing used in this story. To me the style reflects exactly where Anne is in her life.

Yo, Harry:

In the context of this story, what does it really matter what happened in the other stories that angiquesophie wrote? I can name 20 or 30 JustPlainBob stories where the husband is a wimp. Then I can name 20 or 30 other JustPlainBob stories where the husband isn't a wimp.

I'm going to give angiquesophie room to write her story then I'll comment on the final product. In the meantime, I like the writing. I think Anne is one fucked up woman, but I like the writing.

My brain conjures the image from Ridley Scott's film <I>Blade Runnber</I> in which the automated voice from the police cruiser monotonically bleats, "Move on. Move on. Move on."

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Wake me when something important happens.

""" A) I refuse to be judgemental about the moral content of the story until I see where it goes. I recognize that our protagonist is ammoral, perhaps even emotionally disturbed. But that does not mean that the author is either one or the other as well.""" <p>

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LOL!!! <p>

I think, if you was gonna be truly neutral, the correct phrase is: "...But that does not NECESSARILY mean that the author is either one or the other as well." <p>

The word NECESSARILY is necessary! Why is that?, you ask? Because we can assume but we don't know for sure, that's why! <p>

You've taken introducatory to logic, right, Mr. Bullet? <p>

I love it when Lit "authors" come out, sometimes in droves (sometimes in thongs, too!), to TRY to defend each other's work --- saying, "....just because he/she writes about bad and deviant characters don't mean he/she is like that! You gotta separate the writer from his/her characters!" <p>

Well, guess what, Mr.Bullet, many readers have the FREE WILL to make ("fair or unfair" to you/writers) a certain set of assumptions ABOUT the mental, psychological, or perhaps REAL inclinations and proclivities of a certain writer, AFTER they've read a certain set of work by him/her and THINK they have detected a certain consistent pattern, plot device, characterization, etc. <p>

Hence, why the word "NECESSARILY" is needed in your deep analysis of Angie's highly Madame Bovary masterpiece. <p>

Of course, personally, if Angie wasn't a lesbian, if she's single, and if she's really a woman and if she wanted --- even if ugly like hell --- I'd rather take her to Tijuana than criticize her stupid Lit "stories," but those are a lot of if's..........LOL

Is it necessary to necessitate? No necessarily!

I am Anne and I fuck other men. My George, who I love unconditionally cannot give me babies. My George loves only me and I love only him....but I fuck other men. That is our life until George gave me the toy puppy. Did I forget to mention but I lead a vey boring life. I fuck other men and I love my George....I fuck other men and I love my George. Did I forget to mention...I love my George and I fuck other men...or is that the other way around. I fuck my George and I love other men. SHEESH!!!!!

complete version is up on SOL

seriously... her writing style is actually very good... sometimes. But I would of thought that YOU as a author care about the ACTUAL STORY.

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when you come across a story let us know... because Angiquesophie sure as hell does NOT have one here.

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as Many others besides me have pointed out there is No character development here at all. WHY does Anne cheat? how come she is so emotionally disturbed? Why does Anne think that she loves her husband so much that she Hast to cheat?

as to the rest well I have the story all the way through over at SOL and its Just as bad as this one

Anne loves George so much --- and she feels like trash, after causing that little wimp to die --- that she's gonna name the kid, whom she know is VERY UNLIKELY George's and it matters not --- George or Georgiana, in George's loving memory! <p>

That's tight! What an adorable woman!!! <p>

Oh, and, yes, George got 12 short lines from AngieSophie the author! Hehehe. "He said, "I hit him, then her, then him again. And again, until there's blood all over." <p>

He patiently waited his turn to tell us what a fuckin' beautiful loving but unfaithful bitch his beloved wife Anne is. He got to hit her a couple slaps in the face, when she crawl from her lover, in the hotel room, with his dick plopping out of her.... After all that blood, George went home; wrote those 12 short lines describing the scene at the restaurant as well as the one in the hotel room, where Anne's thrashing and dancing on her knees... and then killed himself... <p>

Anne cries her heart out! Poor beloved pregnant woman and wife: one of her one-time-only lovers dead. Her beloved husband's dead. She wished she were dead, but there's a beautiful life inside her needing to be born, a kid she'd name in honor of George, her beloved husband! <p>

What an erotic scene! Gosh, Angie author, you are one erotic, fine writer! Fantasictic! Again, the originality, creativity, morality/lack thereof, sexiness, intelligent dialogues, plot, characterization,,,, they're all first-rate story telling! <p>

101 Fantastic points!

she is sooooooo remorseful that he has to carry some other guys's baby in honor of GEORGE????

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oh come on

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I really like the author's writing skills. She has created a female character who acts like some of the worst womanizers out there. But the story incorrectly presents the fertility problems of George and Anne. Sorry to get technical, but if George has lousy sperm (presumably a low count and sperm that don't swim well), than it is still very likely the couple can have a child who is biologically both of theirs provided Anne's fertility is good. The method is intra-cytoplasmic sperm injection (ICSI) which permits injection of a single sperm into each good-quality ovum (egg cell). The sperm count can be anything better than zero, the sperm don't even need the ability to move, and fertilized eggs can be obtained from the process resulting in a healthy child (or twins, or triplets, etc.) 9 months later. If a lot of eggs are fertilized by this method, some can be frozen in liquid nitrogen for later use, while a few are used for the current pregnancy attempt. It's even possible to draw a few sperm from a man's testicle with a needle, or from the ducts that carry sperm from the testicle into the vas deferens, and use those sperm for ICSI. Can this method fail? Of course, as can any medical treatment. But if Anne is fertile and under age 35, or better yet, under 30, there is a very good chance for success, not the very poor chance portrayed by this author. I would suggest a little research so that when writing about this topic in the future, the facts are presented more accurately.

I love my husband George but I really fuck other men he does not know so really I am fucking with George's head. That's right you are fucking with George's head and if he is the man you say he is watch out when he find's out (stat say men find out 87.2%) he will pay you back big time.

To Readers: If you hate it, why not stop reading?

To Angiquesophie: I'm enjoying following where you take us. Poor George, of course .... But I don't see why (in Ch. 6) having frantic, animalistic sex with George is a "betrayal" of their love. Isn't it just a different way to make love, and why can't that side of love-making be shared with her husband? This is something that wasn't clear to me.

Thanks, ohio

As refined and strong as Ann's variegated extramarital experiences, with a peculiarly ironic, perfect ending, the moreso for being apt yet unexpected.

WHAT A MANTRA TO LIVE A LIFE BY. TK U MLJ LV NV

this showed the first sign of any genuine plot development - the previous chapters were more like a soulless listing of conquests combined with a travelogue of the rewards delivered by financial success.

Story stunk.

Dang you can write, Sophistry, arrogance, and self-indulgence owe you a higher retainer. BRAVO OldBearSwitch

What a load of finely crafted bullshit you write.

It's a justification turd with a pretty bow on it. But it's still just a story about a very shitty woman.

THANK YOU FOR YOUR WRITING