All Comments on 'Marissa's Lesson Ch. 02'

Love the way you mix Spanish in your English, all hot, should we call it Espanlish Caliente? Good story, keep on escribiendo, mi'ja.

Who was the uncle fucking, Marissa or Rita? This is a poorly written story. Your grasp of the English language is horrible.

This doesn't sound at all like the same Marissa from the first story... And though the Spanish is hot, the English part is not... Please work on your grammar - I love your other stories, so what happened here?

Please get an editor. The mixture of English and Spanish in the dialogue is okay, but the bad grammar in the narration part is not. An editor could help you in sentence construction, etc. Please go to the editor's forum in the bulletin boards of Lit, you may find some help there.

His was hot. I want to B her Tio. Good write. Keep it up.