by bassbelly
Nice to read something that appeals to my real world side about "real" people.
and romantic. A pleasure to read, even though there are a lot of small boo-boo's.
For once I see a benefit in having English as a second language - namely, not being disrupted by language road bumps which others have noticed...
nice journey and movement in story. dialogue work to establish a voice for each character in the story would improve the read. they all seem to have the same voice.
a few type-0's i noticed--know-- to-- known. hoe--to-- how. and--to--an.
noticed that all your characters were bigger then life except Mom.
It's about time the nerd got the girl, they are just as human as any macho muscleheaded jock, adonus or spoiled rich member of the poison ivy league. Let's hear it for the underdog?!!!!!
If it was only this easy good read great fairy tale. Thanks for sharing. I like your style.