All Comments on 'They Just Click Ch. 01'

The chapter was too short, and the ending too abrupt. Next time, try to end the chapter with a suitable ending. I'm guessing that you were hoping for a cliff hanger here, but didnt quite manage to pull it off. However, its a lovely little begining, and I for one, will be looking forward to future chapters.

I think Erikah sounds self-centered, although she's supposed to be modest. Maybe you can have someone else describe her and her personality traits. That way, the reader gets the character development from another perspective and won't be conflicted by what are supposed to be Erikah's personality traits. I hope that makes sense, and it sounds like it's going to be a good story.