by embarassed
I say REVENGE on but of them, then DIVORCE her ass or at least threating to. Pay Backs Are A Bitch!!!!!! No Dick For The wife... You don't go changing the rules of a bet after payment has started. The WHOLE night was a setup for the start..
Fair premise, but the weak transition and lack of quotation marks were very distracting. Pronouns were swapped around and the reader cannot really determine which character is acitng/speaking.
Please get an editor!
I agree with the previous posts... hot story ruined by lack of grammatical awareness.
As the rest have brought up your grammar leaves much to be desired. The story was straight out of my dirty little mind, or so it would seem. Good stuff.
This got me harder than anything in the last year. Would love to be in this situation.
She'd be lucky if she wasn't physically hurt by the time he got the pictures back.
Fucking anons don't understand how to enjoy humiliation stories...
Anyway, I really enjoyed this! Humping a college girl's legs is the epitome of hot! Though you need to make use of conversational markers. Stuff like quotation marks. And question marks are for questions. "I heard a loud noise in the hallway?" For example, sounds weird. That's a spot for a full-stop.
Did he get the pictures back before or after he broke more of her fingers? Did she have to testify in divorce court? What an idiotic, poorly thought out story.
Wifey takes it up the ass as soon as little sis leaves. Little sis gets kidnapped,brought into the cellar and is strapped down,naked. Two LARGE (13 INCHES EACH) dildos are attached to a high powered fucking machine and sent up her cunt and asshole for 30 minutes. Now those will be great photos!
My wife and mother-in-law both spank me naked (even though I'm 59). Both are bigger and stronger than I. Afterwards they use me anyway they want and I can't stop them. I'm most embarrassed that an 84 year old woman can still hand spank me to tears over her knee. markiee
What a bunch of crap!!! He stop`s that crap and divorce that slut and expeled them both!! And if it is possible you with them "expeled" I think!!!
What a bunch of crap!! Spank that slut of sister in law until she couldnt walk and dicorce that slut wife!!!
Yes, work on your grammar and punctuation but you have the first draft of a good and sexy story. If you establish that Tom has a history of insulting baby sister and missing cues from his wife (give her a name) I would believe in a heartbeat they would conspire to punish and humiliate him.
No REAL MAN would allow himself to be humiliated like that. He could easily have overpowered them and either tied them up and fucked the hell out of both of them or threw them both out and contacted a divorce attorney. I will never understand the theory of liking humiliation, sexual or otherwise. How Soy Boy Weak Minded are some of you?
"I will remember this for ever Tom, just remember Top I've seen you naked!" Unless she was calling you a top as a joke, because obviously you are a sissy bottom. Write a story about your true desires, sucking big cocks and cleaning your pretends wife's cunt after a real man has fucked and filled her. Bet my story has you harder than your limp attempt.
Nonsense! You don't want to make him believe that there are idiots who let this happen to them? If you have experienced something similar, I give you the following advice without being asked: Have a doctor examine you for psychological abnormalities or go to a divorce lawyer!
I don’t get the hate in the comments…it’s a story!
It’s a fun little erotic tale of fantasy…that was fun. Worth a read!