Do you have any asterisks left ? Or maybe, somewhere in the proofing process, a search and replace went horribly wrong.
And some paragraphs are only the one line long!
In any event, a rather good tale, not my cup of, but forceful and imaginative :)
Try to write more regularly. It will improve your abilities I am sure. Also as suggested in a previous comment you should drop the *s seperating paragraphs. We know when the subject is changing simply by you starting a new paragraph. The *s are overkill.
By the way congratulations on attracting a true racist pig. His comment previous to mine is hillarious.
Yeah, the stars between the paragraphs are not necesarry. However, the story is hot.
That white guy talking shit is just foolish. I used to be kind of a call boy. I serviced many white women. Many of their husbands liked to watch and clean their pussies out, sucking my cum out of the women's holes after I bust a nutt. Some of them even paid more just to be allowed to suck my cock in front of their women.
Black cock rules. WHite guys can have big dicks too, but even white guys with cocks larger than mine have sucked my black cock. It must be something powerful about black cock. I never wanted to suck a white man, but they love black cock just like white women. I dont have much else to say, really.
This is Carrie. I couldn't figure out how to make paragraphs without something to seperate. When I tried tabbing and leaving a gap between paragraphs, I hit preview and the gaps and tabs were gone. I'll try to do better in the future.
Was this written for me? My best friend is also called Karen, though she doesn't get to share my man!
Don't ya just love reading a story with your name in it? It's so hot. You'll have to see what your friend Karen has to say about it. LOL
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