All Comments on 'Niah'

I don't really pay attention to spelling or errors or such but I like how it starts! And it kind of catches you and makes you wonder what happens to the young "stray"!

Please write more, I would love to find out what happens to the lone female.

Clunky style of writing that would benefit of an editor...but like previous posters have said, you have one interesting story going. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Thank you, author.

This promises to be an interesting story. Good writing too (in terms of grammar, spelling, etc). Keep the words flowing and good luck! Hope to read the next chapter soon!

Great start. Please update and add another chapter soon.

Please continue! I like your writing style. For the most part, it was clear, descriptive and well written. You've left us with a mystery - why is this young woman out in the middle of November about to give birth? Don't leave us hanging too long please!

this is great new way to bring a storyline together. What a way to leave the readers hanging -- waiting anxiously for the next chapter!

Marinetown, USA

Excellent start. Please continue. I would love to keep reading!

You've got some rough spots that could use some ironing out. A few spots were a little wordy but seeing those and fixing them comes with time and experience. Your work shows promise and for a first submission, it was well done. Keep it up.

I tend to not comment a lot because often things are taken out of context.

However your work is good, caught my attention and kept it

Polishing is always a good thing but don't get fretting about it..story comes first

A nice intro. I look forward to more!

please continue to write more and with more character development! I'm interested to see how the story progresses.

Enjoyed your first installment. Keep the story going.

I would really like to see this continued. It was a good introduction with great imagery.