by scarfaccio
Aside from some grammar and spelling, thoroughly enjoyable. In the future, re-read and correct, and you might become a best-selling erotic author
one of the most electrifying stories ever. Simply sensational.
Editing-schmediting. Get a proof reader and just write. What a cock twisting story! Keep it up!
This was one of the best erotic stories I've ever read. I thouroughly enjoyed it. Keep writing you might be able to be a best seller.
i really enjoyed your story. i am left wondering and it thrills me... i was wondering if you are planning on continuing the story
Absolutely amazing! Completely loved and cant wait for more!!
The best series on the site.
best story i have read from the site. This story was absolutely amazing. Please continue the story or write similar ones because i am sure that everyone wants more. Thanks.
that was brilliant, this three part instalment is definetly the best story i have read on this site, or in fact anywhere on the net.
you have got to continue it
You should do an Epilogue letting all of us know how things worked out .
did Amanda try to keep him for herself or did he become Every girls
Fantasy Date?
what about Janine did they continue or stay close but Seperate as he got more Popular?
Great story. Always loved the revenge angles, and the sex scenes were amazing
It looks like Janey changed Amanda to become addicted to Chris's cock,and to have Amanda also have her become Janey's bisexual pussy muncher,and at the end I freaking loved it when Amanda said she would get the other girls to join in,so to have a cock-craving bisexual orgy there to make amends for their cruelty to Chris.A Great Ending all the way around.
Well done. I loved it. But if you do continue the series can you please not pimp him out. So many levels to go through before he gets introduced/ pimped out to the girls.
1) he is a novice and needs to learn more about sex, eating pussy, foreplay, lasting longer etc
2) Amanda needs to put everything back in its place not brag about him and the photo.
3) you don’t want him to forget his 2 friends and just jump into bed with anyone who is horny.
I love the backstory and hope you keep with that. Let the three of them learn more, experiment more and make it more about the passion levels and feelings involved/ behind it.
Thanks for reading..
Great. I usually don't like the shorter stories but this one hit fast and "hard".