All Comments on 'The Crystal Rainbow Ch. 01'

I'd like to read more, I don't mean my vote to discourage but I've not really read enough to judge how good it is or will be.

dont want to swell your head but enough praise write morewell done thanks

Please write more, I'm quite intrigued.

it bothers me a lot that although there is no indication of a francophone setting and none of the characters names are in french there are horribly used French words scattered throughout this first part. Damnez-le is NOT a phrase, it does not exist! The poor use of French throughout your work distracted me so much that I could not continue reading.

I will persevere however.

You might wish to check some of the punctuation. It did make the reading a little difficult in places. I also have to agree with some of the comments below regarding the French words.

I suppose the dialogue from the characters is odd because this is fantasy.

Dude this short rocks man or girl keep it up!

Interesting flavor to the story. Look forward to exploring more