All Comments on 'Callie's Punishment Ch. 01'

The story has a really nice theme and good descriptive writing. My big complaint is that you don't keep your language consistent. Sometimes you write in past tense ("He grabbed her ass and spanked her again") sometimes present tense ("He is grabbing her ass and spanking her again"). Either one is fine, but when you switch back and forth its really distracting. I like the theme, I'm curious what the second punishment will be (will he fuck that swollen ass maybe?)

It would have been a good story but you forgot to finish it!!!!

Definitely needs a chapter 2!

Did you mean welts? A whelp is a puppy.

Great start but would love to hear what happens next

Definitely want more!!!

What a shame, I was hoping for more.

Well, thirty lashes by a belt will certainly bring up bruising and possibly a bit of blood. Been there and got that and it hurts like hell. A couple more sessions like that and she will be so obedient that she will do anything to not hurt like that again. Too bad that there is no further chapters so we have to think of what could have happened. There are so many options open.