All Comments on 'My Sister, My Love'

good story ouch ending

And without 8 inch dickies, Double D's, ANAL or the other things which the im-mature males among us write and love to read

the ending makes the story bittersweet and "real",,, it is usually star-crossed lovers that gets to me,,, that makes me think of love, humanity, and our fleetingness in a deep, contemplative way,,,

I don't intend to be mean and rude. This is just my opinion of your story. I appreciate the fact that you took the time to write the story and even post it here! This is my opinion and since I live in the US, I'm entitled to my opinion. However, you have the right to mock that opinion...

The beginning of the story was off. Almost like you wrote the story for a board without the age restrictions, but then did a quik edit to meet the 18 age limit for Literotica.

"She was (at the time of this story) twenty, and I -- eighteen and three quarters" - I don't know anybody above the age of 12 that tells their age like this. I could be wrong, but I'm not that social...

"We were both attending the local high school and at"- no offense as the gal sounded beautiful... but did she have a few candles that weren't fully lit? 20 and in high school?

The love scene was absolutely beautifully written! It made me forget about the beginning!

The ending was absolutely heart wrenching and made me lose an erection while I read it.

I vote 3/5 stars on this one. The ending was just too depressing.

I hope you post others!

Many things that could have been extended, somethings that could have been flushed out. The ending was unexpected and in my opinon not necessary; but I suppose it works.

Make another, and expand. You need to slow it up, and not Leap into the sex. Give us just a little more understanding of the characters, and make someone play hard to get!

Just some ideas you could try.

The story was well written, although I do agree with some of the others that have already posted their comments on the story. It progressed a little quickly, and while I'm not opposed to short short stories, I did expect a little more out of one as promising as this.<br><br>

Also, the age part did seem a bit artificial. If you were going for the almost-19 and 20 ages, then I would have recommended using college instead of high school.<br><br>

Beyond that, I liked the story, I liked the characters, and I liked the ending. I felt the story could be longer, simply by going into a little more detail about the main characters, maybe even adding some dialogue from mom and dad. I would have really liked to find myself knowing more about Anya. Her death at the end is tragic and striking, and makes for great literature, however I feel that if we the readers knew more about Anya before she died, or even simply heard the news as the main character did, that her death would have had so much more impact.<br><br>

Again, I really enjoyed the story, I believe it was well-written, and I will be reading the rest of your stories.

it seems that if he loved her so much that he would not go out with anyone else possibly commiting suicide so he could join her instead of waiting to die years later your alias says it all you butchered the end

Come on, now--they're young, but the human body has limits. Great story, though.

Tender and loving and very well done. I was sad at the end, there is nothing worse than to lose the one you love.