I read both of your stories and enjoyed them but I do have one gripe about spelling. Cloth is a piece of fabric Clothes is something you wear.
You need to go back to grade school and learn proper grammer again. Sentences and pargraphs don't end with - or ... with near the frequency that your's do. About 99.999% of all such can be removed and replaced with , ; etc. which is proper. Also remove any ism's commonly only used in a small part of the world and likely confusing and unknown elsewhere.
Maybe you need to learn proper English yourself. It is grammar not grammer
A different and interesting story, with lots of twists and turns. I liked it a lot.
Your decision to turn this story into a potential rape story, especially of the innocent Pam, is such a total turn-off to me that I probably will never read another story of yours again. Why you had to totally ruin something so beautiful with something so digusting is beyond me. I'm only giving you a 25% because of the rest of the story, but really should be a 0.
I'm the Kelly in the story and my GF Pam and me thought it was awesome. I contacted ATW and asked him to write us a story but I never thought that it would ever be this good. It's New Years Day and pam and I have been reading this and having fun with it, and each other. I told him we both like to think about being used, nonconsent, and when I read about the 3 guys at the end of the story I almost came. I guess I'll have to wait to see what they do to me and my roomie. We Love u Tom IM us at AOL. kellypam18
I thought the story was OK. The ending was an unexpected twist. I thought that you still had more potential with the Katy and Aunt Ellen story line.
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