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great story
I read both of your stories and enjoyed them but I do have one gripe about spelling. Cloth is a piece of fabric Clothes is something you wear.
grammer
You need to go back to grade school and learn proper grammer again. Sentences and pargraphs don't end with - or ... with near the frequency that your's do. About 99.999% of all such can be removed and replaced with , ; etc. which is proper. Also remove any ism's commonly only used in a small part of the world and likely confusing and unknown elsewhere.
To the previous commentor
Maybe you need to learn proper English yourself. It is grammar not grammer
To the previous commentor
Maybe you need to learn proper English yourself. It is grammar not grammer
hmmmm
A different and interesting story, with lots of twists and turns. I liked it a lot.
Wow! Great Way to Ruin a Good Story
Your decision to turn this story into a potential rape story, especially of the innocent Pam, is such a total turn-off to me that I probably will never read another story of yours again. Why you had to totally ruin something so beautiful with something so digusting is beyond me. I'm only giving you a 25% because of the rest of the story, but really should be a 0.
I am Kelly
I'm the Kelly in the story and my GF Pam and me thought it was awesome. I contacted ATW and asked him to write us a story but I never thought that it would ever be this good. It's New Years Day and pam and I have been reading this and having fun with it, and each other. I told him we both like to think about being used, nonconsent, and when I read about the 3 guys at the end of the story I almost came. I guess I'll have to wait to see what they do to me and my roomie. We Love u Tom IM us at AOL. kellypam18
It was OK
I thought the story was OK. The ending was an unexpected twist. I thought that you still had more potential with the Katy and Aunt Ellen story line.
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