All Comments on 'It's Time Ch. 09'

You may want to edit your very first sentence. It now reads, <i>There is a distant far off ringing in my ears as I try to stay <b>awake</b>. The pull though is too much and my eyes begin to open. </i> I'm pretty sure you meant to say, "try to stay asleep."<br><br>

I would have to say that I find the first person narrative more distracting than erotic. It's like listening in on someone's cell phone conversation. All we hear is one side, and we're eavesdroppers. <br><br>

The story idea itself is fine, on-line romance meeting for the first time in real life. I'd like to see what you would do with this same story if you put it into the third person, gave both characters names, let us hear the thoughts, feel the emotions of both.

i hope you will write some more. the last entries i read dated far back in 2008. please please write again. you write well. thanks. :)

that was amazing. very good job.

I have read the first few of your stories, then came across "Its Time". The way you write is very sensual & erotic I would love to have the ability to write as wonderfully as you do. Hope you keep writing, and in this fashion for some time.

Wonderful, amazing and beautifully written.

Best wishes & kindest regards.

Neville