All Comments on 'The Experiment Ch. 01'

but somehow we sense a lot more plot on the way. This is good writing. Do continue!

Sometimes plot is better revealed through dialogue and action. Too much exposition. I don't mind that there was no sex; I just want to experience a story slowly instead of through blocks of massive exposition (with parenthesis).

A nice start, certainly a setup for later chapters, but like the title of the comment says, could use some work. Editing, for example. Also length. Could be longer. In fact, I recommend that any subsequent chapters be longer than this one, at least 1 1/4 pages here on Lit.

Sounds interesting. hope we will hear some more. agree with the action vs. narrative but would really just like to hear more about the plot. hope the muse hits soon.