All Comments on 'The Boy'

Great work! I wish I had a neighbor like that!

cant wait to see if you continue very hot

We need a continuation on this story. Perhaps the boy can come home for Christmas to see his neighbor's belly getting swollen from that sperm he shot into her?

...where absolutely nothing is resolved, and somehow America is to blame! (shaking my head)

Stick to hockey, Big Girl!

and all the American stories are always perfect? give me a break!Canadian girls kick arse

I'm normally partial to mature woman / younger man stories, but this was lacking. There were virtually no character descriptions. We are never even told the boy's name or what he looked like. Dialogue was non-existent. There was very little build-up, and the sex scene was over too fast.

I am also a "older woman/younger man" story fanatic, and I think this was a very good first attempt. Does it need work? Yes. Lots of work? Yes. But considering how few decent stories there are in this gender, and fewer still that are from female authors, I am happy to see a new work.

The author clearly has talented/skill when it comes to underlying feelings and thoughts, as well as a good command of English. My suggestion is that she should put more dialog (and not just a little) in the story and obviously make it longer.

Including authentic and convincing dialog is often the down fall of other authors in this niche, but given what I've already noted, I think this author has it in her to make some very realistic and hot dialog between her characters. I'm looking forward to seeing her style and skill develop as, I hope, she writes more stories.

It's like you have plucked one of my fantasies from my mind when I was that age!! Very hot!

A really nice short story. Well done.