by jadeQ
How much more fucking before these two guys become permanent valentines?
It was quite quick into the sex. He delivered the flowers and then was pulling her dressing gown open? I'm quite new at this but have been reading some advice... The characters should have a reason for having sex.
It was a light story and fun to read. I thought the action proceeded believably for the kind of story that it is.
The basic premise is a good one, but needed to be proofed and edited better. Also, the ending was too forced. Hope you try again.
It is erratic and jumpy. No real development. The wife is as much of a slut as the woman who is with her husband. Why do such people even get married?