All Comments on 'Halloween'

The story needs much more build-up, more time for the heat to grow before they jump each other. Your heroine has good motivation for why she wants to stay home, she needs better motivation to move in on the guy. Otherwise, not bad, not bad at all.

The start is great, nicely building the character of Tegan, she meets Seb and then the story goes downhill because it is too rushed. I would suggest either extending it, or rewrite just tiny little things here and there and make it more a 'erotic couplings story' then a romantic one.

Hi. Thanks for the feedback - will take it on board. To the person who emailed the anonymous feedback, about something in the story being a federal offence,could you perhaps elaborate? From where I sit, I don't understand the comment.

Thanks.

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