All Comments on 'It Just Happened Ch. 05'

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JennyBearJennyBearabout 16 years ago
Great story so far.

I read Chapters 1 thru 4 last night because of a heads up a friend gave me. She was so right when she said it shows a lot of promise. I have thoroughly enjoyed it. I also like your serial method of submission. You will probably get ripped for doing it this way. But it is your story, tell it how you like.

bruce22bruce22about 16 years ago
Initially I did not like it,

because I thought it would be a wham-bang, now

I am even with you both. Instead I find myself

enjoying the layers within layers.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Good writing

You have developed the characters quite well. I look forward

to the subsequent installments.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Whats up for tomorrow

Hope tomorrows chapter is ready. LOL

GaryAPBGaryAPBabout 16 years ago
So far so good

You have assembled a fine array of people and relationships. It'll be interesting to see what you do with them, and how the story develops.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Fine Writing--Confusing Plot

I like your writing style, but I find the plot confusing in this chapter. Jen's sister, Lillie who always appeared to dislike him before Jen married his brother Ed now is hitting on him,while former girl Jen now seems to actively dislike him. Old friend Beverly is now hitting on him which Jen doesn't seem to appreciate either. Ed is apparently sterile whiich, I guess ,will have some role in the plot later on, but I hope it appens before I get too confused.

60 year old George

LynnMckLynnMckover 12 years ago
fyi

It is considered impolite to comment in caps!

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