by KarennaC
and the idea is great, but the language doesn't live up to the promise of this poem for me. I think it's too prosey, has too much explanation and not enough pure image. I think if you cut back on the telling and stuck with the images, you'd have a very funny sort of smarmy poem here. Thanks for the read. :-)
Mostly in the same venue as Angeline. My full sympathy though to the core feelings!