All Comments on 'Pure Heart Pt. 01'

I can tell you have something really special here. Keep up the good work!

Great beginning. I loved your story 'Our Shared Bathroom' and this one looks just as good. Looking forward to the next chapter.

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This improved rapidly after the bizarre conversations the two were having at the start. Needing to masturbate every <i>four or five days</i> - what rubbish!

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But, as I said, it improved rapidly, and I am eagerly awating the next instalment.

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Liked the slow erotic build up-I think the next chapters going to go a lot further

Sweet little story. Good build-up.

i loved your first story ansd im sure i will enjoy this one too, i like slow stories keep it going but do not make us wait too much.

"our shared bathroom" series was my favourite of any on this site. Finally you've returned!!

The build-up is perfect and the writing is fluent. Great job!

Nicely paced. Very smooth writing. Great build up with each new revelation by Sara. Don't make us wait for Part 2 too long.

fantastic had me hooked from the start. the story felt real cant wait for more of this

Very nice!

Really looking forward to part 2.

Thanks.

Thank you..This was really enjoyable...

...I couldn't help but ask why, if the brother felt so aroused, why could he not take care of himself? If a guy needs to masturbate and doesn't want to resort to pornography (for whatever reason, including not wanting to upset his sister), he could conceivably just work his magic by himself and beat off on his own accord, without the aide of porn.<br><br>However, this question was dismissed once the plot picked up. Once the exchange in the bathroom occurred, it became clear that the siblings would benefit from one another's company. As soon as that was established, I began to enjoy the story. The pace was just right, and it allowed for a captivating build-up.<br><br>You hinted at the siblings growing much more comfortable around one another by the end of this installment, and personally, I foresee them becoming close in a manner not unlike the way lovers, or two kids "going steady" would do. However you choose to add depth and romanticism to their relationship is entirely up to you, but the one thing I found that was a bit lacking (that you touched on only briefly at some points) was the fact that they were brother and sister. <br><br>Yes, this is an incest story, and it's been established that they're related, but I think it would benefit the story if the issue of their being related came up during their conversations. The story is told from Alex's perspective, so writing a bit about his thoughts on the new incestuous relationship would be wise, if only to explore that aspect of the story to the readers. Is he turned on just because his sister is giving him a show? Or is he also turned on because he shouldn't be?<br><br>Like I said, you touched on it, but it was only briefly. I found myself curious to know whether or not the notion of incest was an additional turn on for the siblings. Perhaps some more exploration of the issue within the story itself would work. Your call.<br><br>Overall, it was still enjoyable, and I look forward to the next installment.<br><br>-JM

this is amazing keep it up

A truly awesome story. Can't wait for part 2.

I've been looking for new stuff from you...glad to see you have more to share.

You are a god of the incest language. I love your writing.

very nice work ... pleasant read and i can't wait to read more of it.

hot story...need more chapterss....

Great job and i love the way you just take it slow with the storyline instead of just rushing into the sex like most people do.

Brilliant can you write the followup as its a real great storyline.

Please keep this coming! If you aren't sure where to take this next; you could have two different versions of chapter 2. Either way you do it, do it!

I can't wait for more!

Very original, and a great tease. Can't wait for more!

great story. The storyline was great and as one of the previous comments said I enjoyed how you didn't just go right to the sex. I'll be checking very often for part 2!

are you planning on continuing the story? I love the slow build up.. very well done!

I love your style. It's all in the build-up. Keep up the excellent work, and thank you.

Great Work! Good story, built up nicely, great description, did'nt cut straight to the sex and I can't wait for the next one!!!

This is amazing and very well written. Not just a "quick and cheep thrill from your sister" story. I love it and hope to see more.

this series is the best series written on thz whole site,, not da get ryt t it wild stupid fantasyish thn dats totally littering the place but a real true awesome story,,, so cheers to bartok_star

A very nice use of how volatile sexual excitement can build. Good start...

I really enjoy your prose. I battled for years to 'get' dialogue but it's on the money now, as is yours. Look for my postings SOON under James Morrison, 'Fate, and unexpected ally', Ch.1-3. JM

I loved your other series - Our Shared Bathroom.

And this one is starting out with the same awesome HOT vibe!

FIVE STARS!

I'd better get started reading the next part.

first time reading your work and i give you a ten because you take your time with the story not rushing it and teasing us lil by lil

Looking forward to reading the other parts. The intimacy is arousing, exactly how a brother and sister should explore each other. :)

fuck im a cop and need relief call my cell at 462 159 7763

i like incest things and i read about it alot every where but i really dont read like this true b4 A M A Z I N G

Just read it again and it's still as fucking HOT as before!

I really like how you strive to be as realistic as possible and how you slowly build everything up without going too far too fast. Slow build-up is essential to writing these kind of stories. The only thing that doesn't quite work, though, is how Alex just stops masturbating completely unless Sara helps him, as though he absolutely can't get off without some kind of visual stimulation. He tries to justify this by saying he must stay true to Sara, but considering the level of devotion he displays, it would have been more plausible if we had seen more of their interaction before the initial incident that set the story in motion. Regardless, though, this really is a good story, and I can't wait to read more! Keep up the great work!

Believable, Hot, Genuine and Sexy as hell!

Hope that there is much more to come!

lil too fast for me without developing character it started all. but am sure it will get better in coming chapters.

No, masturbating every 4 or 5 days is not MORE than usual for a young man: it is a lot less than usual. I remember those days well, although they are a long time ago.

she thought it was lowlife he was into porn, instead of into it with her .they were saddened he was into porn, not his wife,you dummy, his sister. this story is reaslly not 5 stars, but he lucked accidentally with the unintentional humor, he deserves 5 stars. hes so bad, hes good. anyway he likes his sister better than writing

yesterday, this pretttiest beauty that ever lived, had a pic on here, i write her back telling her my thoughts, of course you know what i said, for i hope to tell the world if she writes back. well, i reaad another reviewer asking if the pic was really her.

"Every four to five days?" Sara asked, turning her blue eyes up at me. "Isn't that a bit more often than normal?" She asked, dubiously.

Buhahaha! Boy, he's a lying fuck, isnt he? Guess he doesnt want to tell her he jacks off a couple times a day! 'More often than normal?' What fucking planet was she hatched on!?

Best just to tell her to mind her own damned business unless she wants me busting in every time she's burying her fingers in her kitty! (But then there wouldnt be a story! Heh;)

'I was still really turned on and it was getting so hard not to return to my computer. But I thought of Sara, and how much this meant to her, and how much she meant to me, and I stayed clean for one more night.'

Mmmchpth...pubuhahahaha!!!! Im sorry, thats too damned funny! 'I cant look at porn and jack off because Ill hurt my sisters sensibilities and feewings ;). (Spewing my coffee on the computer screen;)

Then theres the total oxymoron of him watching porn and jacking off so he, supposedly, doesnt have wet dreams. ...BUT when they start their little dance he's blowing his load in the sheets or his boxers, so no real difference! Lol.

The saddest part is him acting like a twelve year old and not just fucking pulling it out and jacking off like he should. Even a retard would know she wants to see it, and hell, brother or not a guy would want to show it!

All poking fun set aside, the story is still great fun and really enjoyably!

I like this story very much.

Things are progressing slowly... but naturally.

Their minds are adapting to a new situation. To something that both of them desire, but difficult to accept due to their family condition. That takes time.

Your story is fully credible. Well done!

Very nice development, realistic. Well planned and written.

5 stars, can't wait to see this one develop.

Thanks!

I spewed my coffee over his whole reasoning and plausibility for watching porn, lol!! So he doesn't have wet dreams? Bwuhahaha!! Yeah, made that up to con his sister! Mastrabate every four to five DAYS?! Riiiiiiight! Try once a day minimum! He makes it sound like he's trying not to jack off, rofl! Hell, I'm a naughty minded fucker and I've never even had a wet dream!

Alright, this is new for me. I haven't actually read the story because I'm a bleeding heart and I got about four sentences in before I gave up. So, by way of restitution, have a comment!

Great Story!!! Looking forward to further chapters!

Nice build

5/5