All Comments on 'Me, My Girlfriend And Her Sister'

It is a good starting point, but I think it needs expanding. What about the shower? What happened there? Next morning, any regrets, or instant replay of the previous night?

Quite erotic, technically well done, with good grammar, syntax, and all. The build-up was nice, and the sex hot, but everything finished up too quickly. Mainly, instead of the last two sentences, start a new paragraph, give the shower, and perhaps finish with some dialog foreshadowing future encounters, e.g., "Did we wear out our baby?," Tracy purred. "Oh, Babes," I moaned, "You topped my wildest fantasies!" "Maybe so," Nikki smirked, "but I have some friends .." Something like that, but give us more! We loved it!

it was okay!

but was it real?

This was my first story, and I was looking for some constructive criticism, thanks for the comments!

like the others, I would like MORE! Your use of language is good - likewise, your punctuation & grammar (rare for THIS site). You are obviously a guy from the way you write & your rapid end to the story. Give us Another, please. and try not to be quite so abrupt @ the end, Okay?

I get of fuck by my sister susan and her boyfriend alot, we are both tall and have hot sexy bodies. And as we both found out we just love to eat cum from each others hot little slutty pussies. I never have enjoyed getting fuck so much as when i started fucking her boyfriend. He taught us hot to fuck each other and to enjoy the pleasures of fucking slutty sisters.

And i truly love to have him fuck me hard while my sister get horny watching,

I am getting horny just talking about it.

Love ya Carol L

Story should be followed - up with a how they proceeded afterwards. was it a one time thing did it continue as they could or did they make it an all of the time occurence?

This was awesome I wonder if it will happen to me lol it made me cum so much bth oh ya if UR a girl let me

Know and age lol

needed more character development, then of course what happened afterward? Sis Nikki move in? All stay together happily ever after?

More, more, more

DKP

I liked the length of the story. I don't want to read a damn book. It was straight to the point in a good way. I don't want to read about each of there lives and their personalities I just want them to get to the fucking! Good job

Fucking hott hx me jacking off to a huge load

Great start...would love to read more. The ending sort of left me hanging.

I think it would be super hot to watch my wife fuck her bi little sister and her hung teen bf they actually have the same names so i came super hard

Did you copy this out of Penthouse Letters?

It's a decent jerk piece and probably the fantasy of 95% of the male population, myself included. But erotic literature it isn't.

2/5