All Comments on 'More Than Friends'

I'm not a huge fan of the 1st person story, and it was difficult at times to know who was speaking. That being said, it's a good story and certainly deserves to go on!

Your stuff has the potential to get better with practice.

Do not let the previous comments discourage you. You have made a good first effort. Keep on writing. You have talent yet to be developed.

All that's needed is a good editor.