All Comments on 'Taken By Two Boys'

Loved that it was from the bully's perspective, but we got to experience it vicariously through the wimps/victims. VERY well done.

Can't wait for part two.

Loved it one of the best stories i have read in a long time.Eagerly awaiting the rest

I loved the story! But I can only rate this a 50. Here is why:

1. The reader could easily point out when you simply got tied of writing. At that point the typos started to show up in force, and you seemed to have cut corners. When you stated that Jeff had long since ripped off her panties and enter her, then you continued with the story, although you kept it very breif. At this point you basicly stopped telling the story, and that leaves most readers feeling a little bit cheated. It makes a great story just so-so, and a good story suck.

2. Where you ended the story did not seem natural. The guy is the middle of fucking her. Never end a story there. Always finish the current story, then save the next part for another day; like maybe they cum in her, then blackmail her into regular sex for protection of her son. Then come back and fuck her each week until finally she finds a way to stop them, or Billy finally grows some balls. Another thing you could do is save her anal cherry until the next fuck session, etc.

3. You seemed to repeat yourself multiple times in this story, expecially when she was blowing Jeff. This can be done sometimes, but if you drag it out to much, it becomes borring. I very close hitting the back button. The only thing that kept me was that I was thinking "damn, if he spent this much time on a blowjob, the fuck scene must be great!"

Now before I close, you will read some feedback bashing me for my critisizm, and saying "don't listen to the haters dude!" This is my opinion, and I did not hate your story. I loved your story, just not the way you told it.

Practice makes perfect, so keep writing.

Great story! Some moms don't realize how much they can turn on teenage boys by the way they dress. I can only assume in the next part more bullies/buddies are added. Filming her while she's airtight! Naturally the boys have some gang friends. Just don't make it like she enjoys it so much. She's recultantly doing this to save her son. She's so naive and trusting. She needs to be brought down and made aware of the real world.

cant wait for the next chapter

A great start, must do a follow up.

Can't wait for part 2

Cant wait for chapter 2

Cant wait for chapter 2

i love the idea of bullies fucking their victums mothers. i have found only 2 other stories like this. wishthere was more/

WOW hurry and write teh next chapter!!!!!!!!!!!

hope you update soon its a good story

Loved it hop to see more

Can't wait for part 2

hope you update soon

I can only hope you do another chapter.

OMG that was so hot. How many pictures of me naked do I have to send you for you to hurry with Chapter 2?

You have too udate its so good

Man you have got to write more

hope you update soon

Where's part 2

Looking forward to part 2

hurry with chapter 2

Can't wait for part 2

keep up the good work cant wait for part 2

keep up the good work

keep up the good work

hope to see more

hope to see more

what happens next

Seemed to end to soon all that bulid up and the sex was cut short but it was ok

hellooooooo is onustwo there v have a story to complete.A great start.Please post the next chapter.

not to bad but why end it like that? needs a part 2

This was a good story, where is the next chapter? Keep it going.

This is a good plot and as far as fantasy goes, many women enjoy the thought of surrendering and enjoying the forced actions of being dominated.

stories of bullies fucking moms are fantastic

Ever gonna give us part 2

I am interested in seeing part 2 but it looks like you have quit too bad

update soon

what happens next

Good for an only effort. Son and husband should have had to undress her & join in. Keep going though, you'll improve.

i LOVED IT!!!! such a great fantasy....mmmmmm maybe even cuckold me? patmabuttocks@hotmail.com

Dont stop go on

THAT WAS SO GREAT I WOULD LIKE TO READ THE REAT OF IT WHEN IS PART TWO COMING OUT

Thanks for the feedback. Glad you enjoyed the story, chapter 2 is on the way.

well written; very sexy build up and a nice twist on a popular theme. Liked it and looking forward to pt11

THIS has to be the best story i have read here

I am looking forward to the next chapter in this wonderfully demented story. Don't keep us waiting. Write it now.

I agree; please continue.

Anybody know what happened to onustwo? Is he still alive? This story was posted three years ago, and we haven't seen him since. He said that he was going to post a sequel. But still no sequel. I have even contacted him by e-mail. But still no reply. What happened? I'd really like to see this story continue to completion. If the author reads this message, please finish the story!

There are a lot of shitty stories on here that everyone seems to love but this one is a masterpiece, he should get paid to do it.

If you like a bully fucking mom story, you should try this story, here on Literotica:

http://www.literotica.com/s/appetitus-rationi-pareat-ch-01

The reluctant Mom knew she wanted some nice young cock to suck and fuck her aging pussy. Mama wanted to feel sexy again. Her pussy said Oh YES! She was nasty and kinky for her wet pussy to have and hold cock in her tight ass, her wanton mouth and forced to do it all!

Liked the 2 guys for the most part, & their language, & how they treated the son & the dad.

Would have liked them to make the Mom enjoy hewrself. Perhaps even thank them for what she had been missing.-Eatandberry69

This is undeniably an unbelievably hot and perverted tale of home invasion and submission. I think where the story works is in its portrayal of power play between the characters and the sheer ridiculousness of the situation. Despite being a very fascinating, gripping yarn about rape and abuse, it has many grammatical and continuity faults. Anyone notice the mom was stripped twice? Also the ending was kinda rushed and like a commenter said, why rush the actual sex scenes after such lavish descriptions of three blowjobs? Anyhow this story gets top marks for having a truly dark, cynical heart. I don't feel sorry for the family. Their weakness is criminal. Please, Author, write another installment. Or maybe don't if you're heart's not in it. Don't ruin this classic...

Strangely addictive. despite all its faults and the ludicrous concept of the whole thing ( I mean why would halloween be required to do what they are doing) I do find I cant stop reading it So clearly the author is doing something right (as the mixed comments here suggest) but shame that skill isn't applied to far better scenarios, themes and structure.

I hope there is another one where they plunge up her tight little asshole? It seemed like you were leading to that point.

Nice work!

Great plot, love the idea of the bullies taking their victim's mum. Great fantasy scenario, lost its way a little in places, but otherwise really enjoyable! Chapter 2 ?

which actress would you love to be in Amy Robertson's (the milf) place?

@anon Jennifer Connelly?

Probably the best literotica story ever. Hot!!!

How amazing fucking mom infront of son and dad. Utter most fantasy of all boys mom's taking cock infront of son lovely lovely

Wondering how long I could keep Tim and Jeff alive as I tortured them to death.

Even a wimp boy could dial 911. I couldn't get past the helplessness of everyone but the bullies! sorry!

This story turned me on.

As to my voyeur-son side, i observed every move of my mom. I paid attention to how she walked, whot she wore, how she interacted with other people...

My mom was a flight attendant (stuardess was the accepted term then) on intercontinental flights. In those days they were real good looking & well dressed. My mom was the sexiest, or so i believed & still believe. Later on she was doing quality control. She was a lot away on business.

My parents entertained a lot with parties every so often, particularly in the cottage in the summer months. I started noticing that some male guests enjoed my mom's company unusually much. She behaved differently when interacting with them. Whereas she flirted with with many men it was obvious that one was special for a while (overall minimum 3 that i noticed). "...mom's fooling around... Is it just in my head, am i imagining? .. my wishful thinking?"

The cottage had a half-finished loft in the attic just above the living room & the kitchen. The hardwood floor of the loft was also the ceiling of the main floor. On a few spots the gaps were big enough to spy! OMG i was not crazy: i saw my mother making out with one the "suspected lovers" in the kitchen while everybody else was outside. She was in her bikini with apron on the front, was bending to take something out of the oven. He was with her in the kitchen. He gently stroked her on her back alongside the spine from the neck down to her ass and then alongside the butt crack. He was wispering something in her ear. She just said, "You are out of your mind... Someone could see us. Be patient."

My heart was pounding so strongly i was afraid they might hear it. I had to control my breathing. I was not mad at my mom at all. I just became so much more infatuated with her. I was glad she is a woman made of flesh AND hot blood, not an angel (in spite of her agelic face).

Probably should have mentioned them cutting the phone line for this to make any sense.

now that is a hot one!!

Fuck this trash. Suspension of disbelief not happening

"Maybe you're so tight..." Jeff said, sticking his hand down her panties and into her cunt. "...because your husband's got such a tiny dick?"

"Holy shit you're tight... your husband really does have a pretty tiny dick, huh?"

I love it when the attackers of the wife/female niyla chastise the husband for having a small/skinny cock hence why she's still so tight. LOVE IT styers!

... At least it COULD have been. Instead, it was written by a MORON, for the enjoyment of fellow MORONS. Literotica is losing it's edge. There was a time when their stories stood out. Now any idiot with a keyboard can get published, and all too often are. Fortunately there's other sites like Kirsten's where the stories aren't hampered by the need to be relevant! Readers who miss the old days here, should start defecting there. Literotica spends a great deal of time boasting their characters are 18 and over, but give free reign to authors just barely out of junior high. It's hilarious... And discouraging!

You wrote a story of a home invasion / rape and tried to make it kool

Ugghh! What a ghastly story. I hoped that someone would come to the rescue of this poor lady, or that Billy or George would have shown a little more manhood and have at least tried to rescue their mother/wife from the assault of these two evil young assholes, or that a relative or neighbour would come upon the scene to deliver her from this awful torment.

I wondered how perverted the author himself is to write such a scene.

She got what was coming to her and from then on realised what she had been missing because of the husband's short equipment. I hope Billy boy was not subjected to any more bullying. The mother was truly looking after her son's interests.

Rape story , why is it here?

Title says it all. Pathetic little wanker.

Wimpy cuck shit written by a useless cuck who wants his fantasies to come true

Would have liked to see the Mom enjoying it more, and she degrading her son & Husband.-EATANDBEMERRY

ritten bi a 12 year virgin who has only sucked cock, nevr seen nekid woman

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I hated this trash so much I didn’t read the other two chapters. I don’t know of anyone who would enjoy this or even find it the least bit arousing.

I hop you write more.

Oh and to tkh3nkey2110 and the others, lets see you write something and have the balls to submit it to public review.

Interesting criticism from literotica readers who can neither punctuate nor spell.

Enough said.

I really love this story and the other two - a bit simplistic but that has appeal when it comes to erotica sometimes - you haters should find something better to do

This is a real good story! The wife got what she should have and her son and "man" were deeply humiliated as such wimps should. But of course not enough. They should have been stripped, whipped and tied up for the night to come. Crissie.

I agree with sooo many of the other comments. The story is good, but ended too abruptly. Looking for the continuation.

Think about you tied up.and dad beaten up.and your mom being fucked.

If you like that thought.then i dont have anything to say

They are not boys. Adult rape, assault and kidnapping. Needs an ending otherwise just crap.

I want to read the story in which her lover, the cop, and his friends take revenge on the punks for a long weekend then sell them to a Tijuana brothel as piss boys With crushed testicles and shortened tongues W

I liked it. And for the RETARDS who keep saying it ended rather quickly, there are other chapters of this story.

Here’s my wishlist : 1. That while she’s performing some deepthroated head on one of these punks she suddenly bites down with pit bull jawed power , performing a perfect Lorna Bobbitt and then swallowing his appendage so that it sautéed in stomache acid as it becomes digested , so they can’t sew it back on ! 2: upon hearing the now very feminine sounding screams from his fall partner the other derelict asshole runs full speed , blindly into a solid mahogany door , knocking himself out cold ! 3: mama comes downstairs, all nonchalantly , unties her husband and son , then gives them their Christmas presents early , bottles of viagra , a cordless 1/2 “ - 24 volt drill with bits , a Mac 10 with 500 rounds of ammo , two matching .44 caliber magnums with hollow points , a 10 gauge pump shotgun with rock salt loads and with deer slugs , the latest issue of ‘Torture 101 monthly magazine , a couple dozen grosses of m-80’s , some gorilla tape and finally some cases of red bull drinks so they can stay up for several days having perverted ,pleasurable , pain inducing revenge on these two , soon to be slowly dying , fuckfaces !

I really like the way you wrote this story. I used to have a reoccurring daydream in my home . My mother was and still is a fabulous woman. She was also eye candy for my friend and her front yard with the men came to me and said my mother was a whore. I used to have a lot of fun with a pair of her panties as I was looking at her working out in her garden. I stopped thinking about her as my mother, and more like a porn star than gave life to me,,a pervert son who watched her every time she took a bath, changed clothes, .. I would love to have been audacious with the way I was in lust , and set up a mother and son lunch on Halloween day. I love the idea of her and the way her face would change when the men and boys emerged from the shadows. I love the way I feel about it. The moment when she was held by not only her arms, but I also felt so wonderful cummming as I imagine her dress ripped off and her eyes filled with tears. She is slapped by a man , as a boy slap her tits. One thing I could say is an amazing thing is if my best friend request is to see her in a public place or in the front yard as the sun sets on mother and her holes oozing cum.

MOM I LOVE YOU AND I LOVE YOUR HOLES!

Her tears run down and the masked friend of mine begins to pull her nipple and finger bang her two holes. I always thought that if my mom was fucked long enough to get off 30 or 40 men and boys, she would be nothing more than a common whore, and that infertal hole between her open legs, better know as her pussy, would no longer be forbidden to me. I find it hard to imagine it being normal to view her pussy as a cum depot, and if there big dicks fucked her in unison, and her arms could stay in time jacking off cocks, I would be so proud t

After the men fucked my mother for 5 hours, some left, but the remaining 15 men took her to a place where she had a mattress tied to her back and I was a good assistant to the guys. I brought her high heels and the cum soaked pair of her panties. I think it's a good thing to celebrate mother and my desire to watch the tears flow as she cries uncontrollably, all the while having her ass and pussy pumped full of dick after dick. I know that I can hardly control my feelings if I see my mother's teardrops drip of the end of her nipples. Her eyes become glazed over with a sheen of whorish beauty., and her body dripping with semen and her holes oozing cum as I hand her fresh panties. As the mattress is tight enough on her back, she looks at me and I slowly pull my hand over my erect cock. She is ushered through the streets of the neighborhood as she makes a slew of men and boys hard .

I LOVE YOU SO MUCH I GAVE THIS TO YOU SO I CAN WATCH IT AGAIN AND AGAIN AND AGAIN!

Mom is fun to get in a car and drive. I want to know where I can find the right men and boys to take advantage of the opportunity and fuck my mother for an awesome mother's day extravaganza in her own front yard. We can have meth, viagra, and a vast array of sex toys to use on her. I was just trying to figure out how to make a big deal about it because it would be nice if her eyes were looking at me.. I would completely ignore her as she asked for my help. I would simply cum a huge load of boy cum on a plate.

Lick it up Debbie ! Like to say that I am not your son anymore bitch! Now eat my cum you stupid silly cum whore!

I slapped my hand on her throat and my dick , along with the endless line of dicks in our neighborhood, and I began to fuck that pussy hole..

Every time I see the way this story ends.. I remember the way my mom was and the way everyone always thought about her and the way she sucks dick and eating cum my mother is a living legend

I just got my mother's phone with me in the middle of her house sending pictures of filthy milf porn to all her friends and contacts.. fuck her and I have a huge hardon think about this and the way she is going to be fucked silly on mother's day

ATTENTION DANNY!!!!

we're going to have a great time with your mom and find out how many dicks she can take . I am going to try different things on your mom and find out what she is going to do when we get there and fuck her in the front yard. I'm a bit perverted and find it amusing to be a part of this. Your mother's house will be a whore house real soon. I want you to come over and have fun with the madness and find out how much tenderness and look at her running around the house screaming and men every where . I am going to personally fuck her and she is going to be choked too...

If you are reading this Danny, think of your mother being butt fucked on mothers day in her living room while my friends take turns ejaculating on her face . as she screams for help I will slap her .

Fuck you bitch!

I love fucking Danny's mom as my friends watch and laugh. We get high on speed and often wait for her to get home . when I read this story I immediately went to see Danny. I gave him speed and a few Viagra and the next thing I know , he's sodomizing his mother and choking her .

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Debbie and I want to have her son join us .. Her son will be butt fucked before we begin .

I want to fuck him silly as he watches my friends slap and degrade his mom.

Attend Danny s open house

Where we will have alot of fun

Danny stopped me in the middle of fucking him in the ass and I pulled my phone out to take pictures. His mom was spread eagle on the bed with her back to the headboard. Her arms are tied to posts and her tits were swollen from being slapped her pussy gaped open oozing cum. Many of us took turns on his mother and we got to see her fucked silly and high on speed. We gave her so much meth she was going crazy and we thought it was beautiful..

" Please help me Danny!" She screams

Fuck you mom! I have been waiting for this to happen since I was a kid and I am not going to be help you out with anything bitch! .. Danny said.

I pulled the belt out and I choked her . My phone recording .. Danny sucked her pussy and my friend fucked him.

Debbie and Danny stopped by the house to get my friend and I followed. His mother was in the hospital for a few hours when it was over..

Hi I'm interested in the job I got to get an update on this is coming from Danny and my friends are going to be a long day for me and my friends to help with the kids this weekend with Dan and do the needful fucking of the fuck slut mom Debbie and the other mother's day gift cards to get the house ready for a great time with the family and friends. Call me and I will be there at the same time as the other one is Danny and my friend are the best I got to go to the church to see if your mom is coming drugs