by blackfen
You keep writing the mom at 18 is really hot and i doubt things have changed and the year being 2026 will not be any different .
Atlanta,Ga
store is good so far but if you will a bit of a nerd comment here but one lil problem is the part were the computer says"'SAY ALOUD YOUR PLACE OF DESTINATION,'" in the movies you are spoofing the time machine could only move forward or backward in time not space(i.e. travel from cal. to new york in a trip). but other then that the store is good so far.
c'mon man! finish the story already.. it's no good where you stopped. there's all this building up but where is this story really going??
inpregnate mom with a girl and go back and fuck your older sister inpregnate her
Good story and fun to read. Starting to get exciting. Thanks.....Rich
Wonderful series, and very well written, but... I'm dangling here!!! What happens next???
I realize this is an older series but really like it, hope you decide to add more chapters.
Its nice to read upto the 4th chapter but we are waiting for more chapters
There are so many more adventures here. Don't stop... there are many more successful chapters ahead...
I've read all the chapters and i was thinking this is such a great story that I've just got to read more. In fact This is the series that started me out on this site. seeing as i'm such a sci-fi fanatic! So Please Please Please finish this series!!!!
Story is fucking hot, you're very gifted....I think the story is actually a lot hotter in present time then when he goes back in the past. I would love it if he would seduce his mom in real time, like she wants to wait her wedding night so she only gives him a blow job, he goes back in time and fucks her brains out...
Write more stories please....
I normally enjoy your stories but you could've moved this one along much quicker. Seems like he could've been back in time by the end of the first chapter, at least.
You just quit, gave up, never finished this story. WTF is up with that? That is so lame. Do not ever consider youself a story teller. If you cannot finish it, then do not start it.
PLEASE DONE WASTE OUR TIME. DON'T FORGET TIME IS NEVER ENDING, AND SOME PEOPLE USE IT WISELY.AND SOME JUST WASTE IT.......................LAROC OF AGES
I wish I looked ahead and saw comments about not finishing the series. That is mean!
At least you have other product I can look at. thank you for that.
You have yourself one hot story here.
Just needs to be finished or are you scared to tackle the old time paradox thing. After all he is about to make love to his mom before his father can help conceive him thus ensuring he never ever be born.
Just forget the whole paradox thing and finish the story please.
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Very well written and I personally think stories that contain large cocks and huge breasts are just fine thanks.
In fact I really do not understand the criticism about this writer spending to much time writing about a large cock. The author also writes about the huge breasts. After all what is this site about, if not breasts, cocks, sex, etc.
Please continue with this story! Don't leave it at the cliffhanger!
He wakes up. It was all a dream (except the spying on his 'rents)
I think blackfen's still in 2002. :p :p. Time travel eh? What could possibly go wrong!!!! Hehehehe....but still seriously dude u gotta come back nd finish the story...
The show must go on.The story should not end before even plot twist or the story starts to get deep.So Back to the Future Ch. 05 must be a thing.Make it so you must.
Everything was okay until he gave the destination. He gave the house number, the street name, the state, the country, and even the month, day, and year. BUT, he forgot to give the city name to the computer. Therefore he shouldn't have gone back in time nor met his mother during her teenage years. Dude! California is a STATE! In the U.S.A. we have 50 states. Each state has multiple cities and towns. Don't be a dipshit and assume California is one giant city. That only happened in Judge Dredd. Fuckin Dumbassed British Fucktard!
one of the major back lashes of Jamie going back in time to f his mum is that he would make himself non existent unless DNA and weird time travel "shit" makes it so he is his own father from now on and forever be in one massive continuous loop or a changed life style so the loop never happens but then if that where to happen wouldn't Jamie wipe himself out of existence
just curious but have you thought of a solution to this problem yet
I'll finish this story:
"This was it, my moment in time....." when I leaned in to kiss my mother and diverted the course of her life so that she never met my father. Just like that I flickered out of existence, and now float in unwritten limbo.
To go back in time to see the birth of The son of God would you stop his death on the cross but to go forwards in time is another matter we cannot must not make any changes in what has happen or is going to happen
Blackfen, are you a writer or a tease? Do you ever finish your stories? Or are your writing just some rambling ideas where you can't go any further because your ideas have dried out? This was a good beginning, but the main point of the story was the guy getting to fuck his mother in her teens. But if you leave that out you hardly have a story. And you want us to rate your stories. What a joke! Sorry, no stars.