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A Dark Love Story

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous04/08/08

good story

A few typos did take something from the story but over all I really liked it. The 75% was for the typos. Overall I eagerly await any other stories. Write On!

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by Daniellekitten04/08/08

It was interesting and I liked that a dark thing

could show care and love. The first commentor is write, it would have been better with a bit of editing. You had some redundancies and misused words. But I do the same thing so I refuse to mark people down for those. Keep writing.

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by Tricialen04/08/08

Very Different

I like the idea of an evil entity falling in love with a human. And I would like to know more about the world that Eben comes from...and maybe what happens when Zavier grows up and finds his way in this human world. Or does Eben take Katie back to his world? Many possibilities here.. I gave you the high score because I love these stories and despite some misspelling you told the tale and made me want more.

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AWESOME

I truly loved this story, have re-read it over four times and it gets better and better. You are a blessed writer. I do think maybe after she has the baby, that she gains a bit of fae magic..

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great

awesome job. some bumps here and there, but we're all writers here.

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by KokoPelliDragon04/26/08

interesting...

It was a good read but I was a little confused how it jumped from strangers to lovers just like that. It could have used something more in that area. it could use an editor to help u smooth that part over. overall, its an good story.

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by GoddessOfSouls06/19/08

Stunning

I adored your story, it was an exceptional read.

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by Anonymous02/06/09

PLEASE

MAKE A SECOND PART ABOUT THE BABY PLEASEEEEEEEEE.IS A BEAUTIFUL STORY.WRITE ABOUT THE A BABY AND THE BROTHER.IT WILL BE INTERESTING.

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Oooooo

I loved it!!!! Great read!

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by silvertwinz06/10/09

good job!!

i stumbled onto your story and i thought it was awesome!! please keep writing about this family. your writing is nice and i'm happy to come back and read more.

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by erin195510/15/09

The best

I thought this was the best short story i have read on this site.thank you.:-)

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by Anonymous02/27/10

Incredible story!

It was great from beginning to end!

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by cannd06/04/10

I love this story

My second time reading it and it is just as good as the first time! Creative and wonderful. thanks for writing it!

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by Anonymous06/21/10

great read!

It's nice to finally find someone who can write a good story and have the sex be icing on the cake instead of a lousy story with nothing but sex.

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by angin_berhembus08/19/10

Great story

Funny how some great stories can call me to read them again and again, and this one is including one of them.

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by Anonymous08/28/10

Love it

This story is so good. Love your work.

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by Anonymous10/27/10

It's really nice

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by Anonymous02/22/11

Best story on Literotica

I hope that you continue to write here. Amazing story, wow, no flubs, no errors and well written. Closet writer? Pro!!!??? If not now, soon.

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by Mostera110/09/11

Your stories are superb! Thank you.

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by secretito11/08/11

Interesting

I loved this story the whole concept was refreshing. It would be nice to explore it further. I hope you plan to do that.

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by Anonymous11/15/11

loved it

three words: best story ever!!!!!!
please write more

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by daftjane01/17/12

amazing

I love this story more than most. The wickedness and love together make for a satisfying tale. You should continue on with it...

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by Anonymous04/15/12

Anonymous (no freaking duh)

Wow. She really appreciates a good fuck. I was masturbating like crazy reading this.

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by passionflames01/21/13

beautifull

Im impressed.. lovely..!! :)

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by Anonymous04/13/13

sad

am i the only one who started to cry from how sweet it was

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by nickysix06/18/13

Soo very happy they got to live happily ever after!!

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by Anonymous09/01/13

Kind of rushed

Kind of

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by Anonymous09/08/13

I loved it.

Five stars!!!

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by Anonymous11/18/13

T.T

Though it was rushed, it stirred many emotions c: five stars~

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by Anonymous11/24/13

5 stars

Yes stirred many emotions ;-) I like the way he fucks her.i like my men like that

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by Anonymous02/05/14

Needed... A little more...

It was good but it needed more story to it, more plot, more... Just more... It was rushed and it didn't seem to flow like an actual relationship, it needed more building blocks, and it needed to be longer... Other wise really good story. (:

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by kelliebuchaanan05/08/14

Simplistic...

But very, very satisfying! Really enjoyed reading this story but I'm not sure I could pin point any one reason. It's quick without compromising storyline and reads as though its a reminisce of a memory or decision. Really enjoyable!

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