All Comments on 'Adam Loses Himself In M.V. Ch. 04'

....I'm glad Adam finally got his rocks off but when u wrote 'introduction' towards the end of the chapter, I'm pretty sure u meant 'invitation'. Other than the slight mistake in wording, u r doing pretty good but there's just this teeny-weeny thing. To my way of thinking, your chapters r TOO SHORT! What u've taken 4 chapters 2 say could've easily been said in 2! But that's just my opinion.