All Comments on 'Cubicle'

Really effective imagery. I'd wanna get out of that place you paint so well too. Your ending evokes such melancholy after you've painted such a clear picture of the two-sided lives many of the workers stuck inside those towering office buildings.

This poem mentioned in the New Poems Review thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum.

Somehow I feel that the poem is sticking it to people who work in these kinds of cubicles. It comes across as if in the poem they are either unaware of the conditions they work at or they somehow choose to work in these conditions. <P>

At the end, the poem gets us briefly involved in the relations between a woman and a married man. I had difficulty placing this part in relation to the theme of the poem up to that point. Do these relations shed light on the cubicle mentality; do the cubicles explain somehow those relations or are the two parts metonyms of each other? (I tried it, but couldn’t find a way to explain it this way) <P>

Finally, I feel that the post industrial critic coming across through the cubicles imagery is familiar: namely, I have seen similar images on offices with no privacy, when usually your images are astonishingly original. <P>

Before you get all upset and offended the reason I wrote these comments is not to discredit you as a creative poet (I don’t have the authority or the will to do so).

I am usually a fan of your work, and just want to keep it real with specific references to what could not work for me this time. True, workers conditions are a bit of a sensitive issue for me, which probably was a contributing factor, but overall no bashing whatsoever…and I am still a fan who is looking forward for your future submissions...

Captures the dehumanizing nature of that world so very well.

By definition, though, surely they can't all be. This line, though: "The train // is your lateral and last office, the one where we can / be alone with everyone else." is fabulous. You're a good poet, missy. Thanks. ;-)

one of your best. The entire tone was patronizing and confining, not to mention confusing at the end. I find myself wondering what has happened to your work as of late.