All Comments on 'One's True Love'

First, the story didn't flow well at all. You need a lot of work on grammar and sentence structure. Look through the Literotica Volunteer Editor program. Second, Will there be more? I like what you have so far and with some polishing, any future chapters could be quite interesting.

turn on your spell check and grammar check or find an editor. I am assuming you plan to finish this story. Enjoy the experience.

Nothing redeeming here. The author doesn't even know how to spell Libya.<p> This may be a story in the long run, but it should undergo a lot of editing and polishing.

OK for a start but where's the rest????????

keep it up you will get better in time please write more soon can't keep all of us hanging can you ??

The problem is that he doesn't!