All Comments on 'Cowboys & Indians'

But you need an editor.

However, you really need to work on tense. You used a lot of present tense when you were telling a story about something that has already occurred; some other mistakes as well.

Leaving that aside, the story was decent. Don't give up, just find someone to proof read your work.

Great story. Good development, but not too long.

I want an aunt like her.