All Comments on 'House Sitting'

This story was filled with sentence fragments, and there was that all-too-common shift between past tense and present around paragraph five or so.<p>Author, please use an editor, since you clearly lack writing skills.

This is for entertainment not publishing in a book. You want to tear it apart when this is the first time I have written from a male point of view. Fine.

But I don't see you leaving your name, nor do I see you submitting stories. So have a great day and hope you find a story that tickles your fancy.

I for one enjoyed the perspective that you presented. I can imagine the development of this story. I have to admit that it was refreshing to see a story presented from a different point of view. I would hope that you continue to develope more stories along these lines.