Unlike many it was very believable. I liked the way you lead into the 2 women discussing lesbian sex. Great job!
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Anonymous06/01/08
My neighbors
growing up in my neighborhood, the house next door was the parsonage. Everyother day, the same lady would show up and enter, and four hours later or so, she would leave. Never thought anything, since I was only 8 or 9 at the time, but, eight years later, found out she was making love to some of the ladies in the neighborhood. Was wonderful to jack off too.......She was gorgeous.
Thank you for all the kind words. I write these stories with you in mind and nothing makes me feel better than knowing the readers enjoy my stories.
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Anonymous08/22/08
Compliments About THIS Story???
You must have written the compliments for this story yourself, since I can't believe ANYONE ELSE could have enjoyed this pathetic excuse for erotica!
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Anonymous06/29/09
I'm not the author...
but I liked this story. It was a believable situation to get into. Being a former church girl, I wish I had been able to seduce more of my friends like that. I did do it once, and it was good. Brings back good memories.
Your story had a good idea to work on, but you rushed it through and didn't elaborate a build up, the way real women would have done it. It seems to end up nothing more than an excuse for sex and a poor one at that. Try harder next time to develop your characters and the set up scenario. Inner feelings and emotions are the basis for a reader's involvement to enjoy the character and the events that follow. Didn't give you a zero, because you do have potential here and hope your new works will improve. Lance
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Anonymous09/24/09
sex and passion are great
Just show that if you are open you can enjoy life to it's fullest.
I think this story is very believable. The conversation leading up to the sex was sweet and much what I would imagine would happen between two beginners. Good first try. Would like more development on the sexual side of it, but I enjoyed it.
English
very sweet
Very nice story.
wonderful story
Unlike many it was very believable. I liked the way you lead into the 2 women discussing lesbian sex. Great job!
My neighbors
growing up in my neighborhood, the house next door was the parsonage. Everyother day, the same lady would show up and enter, and four hours later or so, she would leave. Never thought anything, since I was only 8 or 9 at the time, but, eight years later, found out she was making love to some of the ladies in the neighborhood. Was wonderful to jack off too.......She was gorgeous.
Thank you
Thank you for all the kind words. I write these stories with you in mind and nothing makes me feel better than knowing the readers enjoy my stories.
Compliments About THIS Story???
You must have written the compliments for this story yourself, since I can't believe ANYONE ELSE could have enjoyed this pathetic excuse for erotica!
I'm not the author...
but I liked this story. It was a believable situation to get into. Being a former church girl, I wish I had been able to seduce more of my friends like that. I did do it once, and it was good. Brings back good memories.
Had Potential....
Your story had a good idea to work on, but you rushed it through and didn't elaborate a build up, the way real women would have done it. It seems to end up nothing more than an excuse for sex and a poor one at that. Try harder next time to develop your characters and the set up scenario. Inner feelings and emotions are the basis for a reader's involvement to enjoy the character and the events that follow. Didn't give you a zero, because you do have potential here and hope your new works will improve. Lance
sex and passion are great
Just show that if you are open you can enjoy life to it's fullest.
Short and sweet
I think this story is very believable. The conversation leading up to the sex was sweet and much what I would imagine would happen between two beginners. Good first try. Would like more development on the sexual side of it, but I enjoyed it.
A Little Rushed
A bit of hurry involved, especially in the disrobing of each other, but still a great little story. Please continue to let it unfold.
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