All Comments on 'Twin Sex'

A beautiful love-story at its beginning , please write more of it.

But we do need more!

good start but i will only give it a 25% because i my experience 90%of the writers on this site never finish thier stories if you finish and do so in a short time and give it a good endding then i will give a higher rating

I hope you write more

write more, you can't just leave off there.

If you don't this story will suck majorly.

Shes a stick and there wasnt much in da story except licking and sucking.

you want contructive critisism here goes

1) always use a good editor

2) always put it in the proper catagory this was fine unlike others

3) ALWAYS FINISH WHAT YOU START NEVER LEAVE THE READERS HANGING

4)always keep it somewhat realistic and believable NO FANTASIES UNLESS IT IS IN THAT CATAGORY this one was fine

over all it was good but nowhere near finished so start writing NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

learn the difference between ass and pussy. if she is sitting on him and facing him his cock would be in the crack of her pussy not ass. only two ways it could be in the crack of her ass 1)she is laying on top of him on her back or 2) he is nude and his cock is sticking up in the air. time for you to go back to school and also time for a rewrite and a GOOD EDITOR.

I would love to read more Me gusta mucho, muy bueno.

i see we still have no second chapter from this lazy writer even though he has been on the site this year. time to do one of three things

1) finish the damn story

2) get aghost writer to finish it for you

3) last resort delete the story and never write again

your choice but man up and do something

I came six times wanking to this story. Then I fucked my sister after she read it, and I filled her cunt with baby batter. She loves my white sauce, and we're going to have a baby now.

Great start...Why did you stop

Loved the first installment Deisel50 I can't wait for the follow up.Keep up the work.

... But you never continued it

CONTINUE>>>>>WTF

loving approach to sex as a woman would tell it and a man and a man would relish it ...... not raunchy