All Comments on 'Sweet Sensations'

i have read some shit in here but this is the worse i've seen .....so many errors

You need to get an editor to fix this if you want it to be any good. also it would be good to at least hint who's first time it is supposed to be. Also to kiwi the previous comment writer, that was way beyond constructive criticism and you need to get a life.

This reads like the fantasy of a youngster who has yet to actually have experienced any of what he or she is writing about.

...and a youngster with, at best, a tenuous grasp of the English language.