by AGreyFoxxx
This was well written and the plot was a good one, but if there had have been more tension between the cousins and build-up it would have made the story more exciting. It seemed like it was over just as it was getting started. Also, each line of dialog should generally have it's own paragraph. This makes it easier to read and less confusing for the reader. Keep writing and I'll keep reading
"Up against the door! Right here! Right now! Kind of like Sonny and the bridesmaid in The Godfather."
That conjures up such a vivid image for me. I can see Sonny banging Lucy Mancini right now...
I like how it goes straight into sex. I always skip all that boring blah blah blah in the beginning of stories!
keep the cheating out of it, it only ruins the story and the lives of the people in it.
Super-hot story. Cousin stories are my favorite incest stories, and this one is good! Plot is believable and not the ordinary middle-age-adultery stuff. (Yes, of course it's adultery, but the cousins' sexual attraction had started long before her marriage to an alcoholic, impotent jerk.) Now if she could only conceive and then make hubby believe that he had bred her while drunk and just couldn't remember it!