by pmbluemoon
Thank you for such an excellent piece. You left me desiring to know what "it" was so I could give you a hug.
Ahh the ever-mutable "it". You made your audience need to take part and roused a whole bunch of empathy with your words but what would really make this poem outstanding in my view would be to condense it as far as you can through pruning and finding that one moving thought about "it" that would send SB into tears rather than just needing to give you a hug. Good poem, thank you for letting us read it.
After reading the other two comments, I have to say that I kind of like the mystery of it.
I feel it. Sometimes shit happens but we don't have to just accept it.