by wgarvin
... he didn't fuck Mrs. Darling? Great set-up, great seduction, a great blowjob, but then nothing else? A bit of a letdown. But still worth it.
Also good work on adding the nose bleed elements - this makes the mind control more interesting.
Lots of blowjobs there in your writing. Wish Mrs Darling had been touched, caressing and penetrated.
Really good, but can you have more than blowjobs please? He needs a fuck!
This was a really hot story and we do hope that you will write more about it pretty please :)
A very exciting story. I hope that you will be able to write a few more chapters with just as exciting encounters.
I dont understand, he has the power/gift for 2-3 days and he is having only blowjobs. Man get ur dick up and fuck a girl. He practically made his friend a slave and didnt even fuck. He seems to be quite dumb & idiot for his age.
Story line is ok, but u should give some background how he got the power. Some base formation type. Dont jump from one place to another, but weave it from one scene to another. Also give the story a plot and make him explore and learn his power. As per you, he is not even trying to look or think about his power, that can be ok for a one time singe level story, but you opted to make this a series. So atleast try and think lke a 18 yrs old, not a school kid.
All you jokers complaining about the bj only etc, please write yur own story..gez
The young man is doing well.. soooo many other females to pick from and acquire into his harem... Go for it
I have enjoyed your stories and was looking forward to see what is going to happen when his sister and her friend show up.