All Comments on 'Husband's Revenge'

real revenge was? The slut wife basically got away with her behavior and the rest of the idiots suffered minor collateral damage. No details of the emotional slaughter nor any hints on the quantifiable financial damage. Big deal - he gets a well deserved promotion. What an idiot to begin with!

At least he wasn't running around jacking off while his slut wife was fucking the towne. Too many whore wives cockold hubbies who love it stories so you never know. A lot of people seem to think it's not only o.k. it's cool.Hopefully they don't really act that way. Thanks for the story.

I like revenge stories; but this guy couldn't plan a gangbang in a whorehouse, how the fuck would he pull this off. Who the fuck is Meg married too, anyway because earlier in the story, she was married to some other pantywaist and now all of a sudden, she's living in his house?

you wasted the ten minutes.

They put it quite well

Should have been in Humour & Satire. Good for a laugh, but that is all. I enjoyed reading it though.

I would give it between 85 and 90. You definitely belong here and I hope you continue to submit frequently. You tell a good story.

It was a bit bare bones, but a nice change in using the arrows. Too mechanical though.

Good old "WTF" showing once again that under a shroud of anonymity he doesn't have a good word to say about anything. As for the others...well, read the story a bit more carefully before hitting the keyboard with your cretinous comments. 1. Meg was married to the plumber Tim Blacklock. 2. I wrote it simply so that idiots would be able to follow it. Obviously the sub-text in the section 'Three months later' was too hard for some people. And since when was abuse and stupidity a constructive criticism?

Was interrupted at the half-way point, and ruminated on ways i'd like it to go.

My favoured ending was the husband telling the civic leaders to persuade the wife into a no-fault no-assets divorce, making whatever necessary financial contributions to the wife, (surely there was a judge on film somewhere) but this does give the wife a bit of clout, whereas she should have none.

b) a flat fee to the husband.

or else all is revealed,

Everyone ends up happy, oh yes, getting a promotion wasn't a bad idea, as well.

Well-writ, author.

I M H O you do better at this genre than the threesomes, etc down by the riverside.

(only foolish people go, he said, down by the riverside)

Cheers,

Kilroy

The guy has photo evidence in hand, then destroys it, then spends most of the story getting photo evidence. Very dumb indeed. Also, arson is a serious crime.

Entertaining fantasy. Of course the arrows would have been noticed and hubby would have been the prime suspect. Still, firing flaming arrows at the steeds of your enimies is a nice vision! And capturing the wronged damsel for one's own makes it sweeter. And best of all, our hero gets his dog back!

The story has some rough spots both in the writing and the details, but I liked the plot and the word pictures were pure amusement... Thanks

First, thanks. It takes a lot of guts to post a story here, especially with some of the abusive comments some readers leave. That said, now for some suggestions. Your story had so many incredible lapses that it really belonged in a fantasy section. 1) Most western countries now have no-fault divorce. A quick google search brought up the following for your country: "The Family Law Act 1975 established the principle of no-fault divorce in Australian law." This means that the court does not take into account "fault" such as adultery. You want a divorce, you get it. Property is divided by formula with consideration for earning potential, children, length of marriage, retirement, etc. It does not consider the behavior of the parties during the marriage. It also means that it is next to impossible for either partner to fight a divorce. From a legal stance, your protagonist should have been angry at his own attorney. Why wasn't the family domicile up for sale? She should have been paying rent to him for staying there. 2) Are Australian police brain dead? Do you not import CSI-? It was obviously arson. Pictures turn up. Who could it be? Let's see, the female resident is currently being divorced … no need to check up on him! 3) You cut out a very interesting section, Meg and her cheating husband. 4) The mayor, his boss, the local evangelical pastor … too much over the top here. BTW, I am taking time to give this feedback because I think you have talent and I hope it helps. Thanks again. Ttom

Keep writing, you will only get better. Most enjoyable read.

Could it be better - why sure - everyone can get better. <P>

The truly important issues are: was justice served - was the little guy more fairly treated - were the evil transgressors vanquished - was there a small bit of excessivism involved to make it happen - was it humorous intentionally or maybe ????<P>

Of course the answer to all these was - most certainly!!!<P>

Author - you had fun - we had fun - and the righteous conquered. YEA ! How much better is that then wimpie self cucksters watching their wife ho's and jacking off? <P>

Immeasurably !<P>

Author - in this vein we look forward to your next - Thanks!<P>

With High Regard

Enjoyed it.

Great ending, and as someone said quite humerous

Keep it up

remember they write for our enjoyment not everything needs to work out perfectly. As a story I kinda liked ti please keep writing.

I agree with pretty much everything you stated, but especially, "It was obviously arson. Pictures turn up. Who could it be? Let's see, the female resident is currently being divorced … no need to check up on him!"

<P>

First he was a moron for getting rid of all of the evidence, but then he compounded it by committing a blatant act of arson when he would be the only logical suspect.

fun. I enjoyed it.

A little uneven. And it didn't explain how a perfectly happy wife went from prude to slut in two easy moves.

it seems almost impossible for a 12 year old to write something like this. but the silly plot and sillier dialogues looked as if this was written by a kid in his early teens, for a husband hero with an IQ of 78? <p>

and on revenge? he showed the audience, with a grin, his mercedes benz at the "final scene"! LOLL

I loved the story but you need a english dictionary and a editor to correct your spelling and turn on your lamp when typing out your story next time.

Glad to see so many have enjoyed the deliberately light hearted nature of the story. My heart goes out though to the character who wrote the epistle that details my plot transgressions and ignoring the fact we have 'no fault' divorces in Australia. He is right but that doesn't make for a very exciting story though does it?

Cheers

Friskee

Truly hilarious! Thanks for posting this one. It reminded me so much of some old 3-stooges slapstick. Absolutely wonderful.

Of course I voted it as a five! ;-)

Just where you least expect to find it - namely in the midst of one of the most painful experiences people could go through. Self deprecating while taking revenge on the wife, it's almost a study in contradictions -but in this case it supplies plenty of comic opportunities which seem to increase as the story progresses... By the time the tree was smoking I was not giggling anymore - but bursting in loud laughter and cheering to the gutsy ex with the two left hands!

it was a problem to initially tear up the photos, etc, in the short term, but the whole thing worked out well in the long term. al with humour too

It was too contrived. Author needs to keep it simple so the story can be realistic.

and now for a start over. TK U MLJ LV NV

if they place a tax on brains she'll only owe a penny

Don't you just love a good revenge story.

HA

A fun read.

A little something for everyone...a really fine little tale!

I liked it and finished it but - I damn near left when he was destroying the evicence of his wife's adultery.

Even though this is a story - he's supposedly an intelligent man and you had him acting like a Kindergarden drop out - no common sense.

Overall, entertaining but the plausible and potential reality of a real man conducting himself like this guy - Not!

Thanks. Sorry, went from a 5 to a 3 over asking me to accept him as a smart guy.

Don't you love when the cheaters get screwed in the end?

The author could've spent more time with details. What happened to the whore wife? He could've sent images of her to all her Facebook friends family and demoralized the people with better organization and details. The fact that the authors gave this bumbling fool so awkwardly a revenge was seemingly nothing short of a miracle. He should've made a sound recording so they could be jailed for prostitution or whatever else could be thrown at these pigs. The poor dog Fred, even he had a happy ending. I think this story was a 9.5 on a scale of one to five but it could've been a ten. The was excellent but needs an editor if publishing. Great story love the ending.

I've read this tale a number of times and each time I shake my head and ask how anyone with raw evidence of his wife in action would be so stupid as to destroy needed divorce court material because his emotions dominated the moment. It is amazing that Mister Hyper was able to start the fire... what a yokel. However, the story is well written and entertaining... hence it deserves four stars.

need to give archery lessons, TK U MLJ LV NV

breathing, then the revenge is incomplete.

On strangers that were taking free pussy? Fair enough! But where was the revenge on the wife? After all, she was the one behind all the cheating. If the other guys didn`t get it from her, then they would have gotten pussy elsewhere. So what was her punishment then? Public embarrassment? Unlikely, as she was putting on sex shows and fucking strangers in gang-bangs for sport, so she is definitely not a shrinking violet. If anything, this was positive publicity for her, and probably got her a career in porn, or interviews on talk shows. Her story would be titillating and highly sought after by the media(or porn producers). She didn`t seem the type to shy away from the spotlight, in fact she revelled in it! Her husband already knew, and was divorcing her, so discovery and exposure was only of benefit to a woman like this. The whole episode would have been more embarrassing to him, than to her! So again, what exactly was her punishment? Deprivation of cock for a few hours?

That`s the problem when authors go to extremes when creating cheating housewives. Nobody changes THAT drastically after watching one porn film! Hell, nobody is that sheltered anymore. Every man, woman and pimply teen has seen at least some pornography growing up. Was this woman raised in a convent? And one new sexual experience does not a pornstar make. Overnight she goes from prudish to lesbian gang-bang cum eating queen? That must have been some porno he showed her. I`d like to watch that one myself! If a woman becomes that trashy, then she WOULD be in porn, and making big bucks to boot!

In an effort to paint the wife character in the worst possible light, the author goes so far outside the realms of believability, that as the reader, I had no interest in the narrative. A reader can`t get pulled into a story if it doesn`t seem plausible. The characters become more like caricatures. (A mayor, a priest and book-keeper walk into a brothel). Yes, it`s fiction, but it still has to be believable fiction. Just have a cheating wife in the story, not a pin cushion.

Actually, instead of making us hate the faceless wife, the highlight of the story was the titillating sex scenes. Not what you were going for I think. Normally I would be burning the bitch on main street, and sending out for more petrol, cos I HATE cheaters, but in this one, I couldn`t believe the story enough to do that.

As being stupid as he is, they deserve each others! Destroyed all substantial evidences and proofs of her whoring and tried to obtain new ones! what a joke!

Just a buttonhole husband acting like a jerk.

I loved it every frigging bit of it

I hated each and every word of it. Guy is a nut case.

The revenge was impulsive and not well thought out by the protagonist who acted out on sheer emotion which is very plausible. I read some of the other comments but I totally disagree. Just my opinion and my name is not anonymous. As far as his ex-wife getting a career boost as a porn star is immaterial to this story. Her notoriety as a loving devoted wife was what most persons knew her as. The exposure would likely have her solicitor disbarred for having sex with her as his client. The ex-wife would lose credibility in any courtroom concerning her divorce in most states. Since no children were involved it should be a slam dunk. Additionally, Fred is reunited with his favorite master and Meg is a bonus and Dave is replaced as a boss and philandering husband. How could you not give this five stars?

It's about fucking time that a guy in one of these stories isn't portrayed as a total wimp,and comes out on top. It may not be the best written,or thought out story on Literotica,but at least it doesn't have the husband turning out to be some limp-dicked bastard whose wife shits all over him and he just takes it!

just say super bro i love that story please write some more on Husband's Revenge please

Any time a cheating cunt wife and all her fuck buddies get caught and punished is always a good thing.

Humorous!

Leave the wife: no doubt. Leave the dog: Never.

the world and mans best friend live happily ever after, TK U MLJ LV NV

It has all the elements of a good story. It is lightly sprinkled with humor. Although the husband, when first confronted with evidence of his wife's infidelity, he acted anything but intelligently. But, fortunately, the husband in this story was gifted with a second chance to right the wrong done to him and his coworker Meg. I enjoyed the ending. Husband is vindicated. Wife is ousted from his home. Husband's boss is removed and replaced by husband, complete with perks. Husband winds up with home, promotion, divorce, Meg and man's best friend.

Question? Why didn't he wrap the rags around rocks and simply throw them in the gas?

Glad you told us it was fictional!

Honestly, never would of guessed!!!

I just wonder how long it will be before the hubby introduces his new lover to the wonderful world of porn and what the result will be.

I Wonder is he under age, and his parents had to sign for him to get married?

1. he destroys the evidence.

2. He has no plan.

3. Doesn't know how his phone works.

4. Running from the lovers in his house.

5. Playing with his little bow & arrows.

6. Almost got burned.

I won't bother you with more, but there is much more.

I would love to give you negative number, but I can't. 1

PS: idea was good... dune up to shit!

My was he taking pics at all (causing the flash with the first one) when he had a video function?

Bloody good read

Yeah, the guy was stupid for destroying the original evidence. But he eventually got new evidence and was able to take care of business. Nobody got hurt and pretty much everybody got what they deserved, be it good or bad.

Good little story with a nice burn. Would.liken to know more about the wife.

5* from me.

Really good old fashioned BTB.

Please, in future stories, dispense with the wronged husband having nausea or vomiting. A good old feeling of anger is acceptable. Nausea, vomiting, come on.

very poor start to the story

This is the canned version of all cheating wife stories. Writing is really terrible and grammar is miserable. Badly need a writing class.

Again,a fun story of what revenge on a cheating wife should be.

I liked the initial set up of the plot and the lead in with Meg and Google Earth. It was decent foreshadowing into how things were going to play out. Unfortunately, once the MC actually decided to try to get his evidence and revenge it just got silly. Plot holes the size of Wisconsin here. Even still, I would have (possibly) given this a passing grade had the ending been more satisfying. Alas, all we got was some basic summaries about some evangelist we never even knew existed and the MC getting his house back and vaguely getting together with Meg. No details on what happened to his slut ex or specifics about the divorce, no details about Meg's divorce, nothing about anyone else at the gang bang... Hell, how did the slut attract every influential man in the town, anyway? Oh, and Tim, conveniently the only plumber amongst mayors, evangelist pastors, the slut's own lawyer, and local business owners. Between that nonsense and the MC trying to play Rambo in what any novice fire investigator could tell was a clear case of arson, I just... no. Sorry. Wasted potential.

For future reference the term is drawer, as in chest of "DRAWERS". Skip the nausea, anger and fury are much more realistic. Getting drunk is kind of stupid too. Nothing to be gained but a hangover, and probably some of the previously mentioned nausea.

To many missing pieces of the story. Finish the story,

What happened to the wife and her solicitor? There could have been a longer ending with what happened to them. In fact did she never try to talk to him after he left?

half a story half a score

1* for no finish.

STUPID.. Stupidest hero and stupidest plot ever...

Ok story, but incomplete. Especially the partial ending.

The problem with this story is the erratic pace. The action parts go excruciatingly slow, the rest is dispatched in two lines or just forgotten about.

It looks like you had that action scene you wanted to publish so you just wrapped a minimal plot around it and that's it.

I enjoyed the story a lot. Thank you.

So far part way through page 1:

Introduced a good wife that porn

Destroyed the evidence

Left his dog behind

Still has a shit job

Hmmm

Good finish but the pics and the arrow and the can bring him under suspicion since someone had to take those pics

2 stars, & I'm being nice. He finds proof of his wife's infidelity & destroys it. Seriously? Buys a new camera & doesn't check for the flash function when trying to catch the people of the orgy without them knowing. Although I liked the ending, with pictures in the newspaper, I thought that some of the story was a bit hard to follow. Bob

That was a real fun lark, had me laughing?

Scores 5/5

What an insult to the reader, the last statement ' This story is fictional' it was a load of rubbish, so far from reality it couldn't be anything else but fictional.

Fun story!

3-4 star story. You rushed the ending

That was fun. I wasn't sure at first, but when the action started it was a lot of fun.

I usually don’t agree with that man hater, Helen1899. But she was right about one thing. ALL the stories on Lit are fictional. The author does not need , to point out the obvious. But any story that Helen and her cats hate, I love. 5 stars.

;-)

A little fanciful, but I loved it. 5 stars, the Bear approves. He even got the girl. Good read. Thanks, mate.

The BEAR

stupidest ever; three stooges in action...

That's a fun story.

A literal burn in a good story.

Great story but obiously needs a follow up.

Almost believable, but not too bad a story with BTB and her clients.