by lildeb5281
It's a good story and I enjoyed it but it would be improved with a proof-reading and some corrections.
I really like the style, the writing is pared back to the minimum, each story is an improvement on the previous one, so I am looking forward to reading more.
I loved the idea but it was let down by poor spelling, grammar and changing tenses.
This was a potentially very nice, tender little story but it was spoiled throughout by poor grammar and some truely dreadful spelling errors.