by misslusciouslisa
Hi Lisa,,
I just wanted you to know I just read your story of you catching your little brother jacking off... Damn you know that you can write erotic stories.
I got a major hard on and read it 3 times as I was touching my self.. And when I shot off if was great,, I shot really far thanks to you...
Please keep writing... you are sexxy as Hell... t/y for making me feel good :-)
There are some very realistic elements in this story. More sisters should help brothers out. This story can continue in several directions. Keep writing you have potential
Wonderful sophomore offering. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Would have been awesome if she caught him rubbing her panties all over his cock!
Loves it when I take care of his business. We started similar to this story, but I walked in on him laying on my bed jerking off.
It's been 3 years and I've milked a gallon of cum from him :-)
A very hot story. I loved how he was jerking off into the panties. More please.
So much improved from your first writing. Loved the way you left us wanting more at the end of the story. Eagerly awaiting your next one.
This was really quite good, you have some grammatical mistakes, mostly I think there typos but other than that this was really good. Keep it up!
One of the easier ones to read in my opinion. The story really kept you interested and you really couldn't stop reding once you started. Overall i give you 100% and hope to see a sequal soon.
dam u got me soo hard lisa. u sound very hot too with your tits and everything. hope to see a sequel
loved the story. my sis used to tease a lot and want to see me cumm
I don't have a sister, just 5 brothers so I know I missed out on a lot of fun. This is a very good fantasy read. Lets see Ch2.
Makes me remember -with extreme detail - my 1st fuck. My sister. I'm 48 now & after al the women over the years that still rates as the best orgasm I've ever had.
Great content; however, the point if view is off. How do you know what your brother is doing without seeing it? You can't be the observer seeing all before you got home and the character at the same time. If you want to write what he's doing before you get home, write in third person omniscient. If you write from first person point of view, then you can only write what you see.
ahh man i got as hard as a rock reading this story please let there be more
Grammatically flawed. Over use of certain words. First person to third person and back again. Too straight to the point with no build up.
I liked your story a lot. Hope you finish chapter 2 quickly. I can hardly wait.
I loved the way you told what happened. My cock got so hard reading this I had to jackoff. Had I been your brother I would have eaten your wet pussy. I'm ready for this to continue.
ohh god i love cumming in julies panties oh oh ohhhh im cumming in a pair now ohhhhhh julie oh god julie your so sweet im cumming again oh ohh julie im going to put these panties full of my sperm back in your clean pantie drawer
Very hot! Love to find the continuing escapades of this horny bro and sister. Let's have cock sucking, clit licking and fucking. You really have a talent for dirty stories!
MMMMMMMMMMMM!!!!!!!
You need to set a story aside for two or three days, then go back and READ it. You'll catch the missing/incorrect words and typos.
Keep up the good work.