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Katie's Secret

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by Anonymous01/11/09

Overall good, but could use work

Watch your sentence structure. You have a habit of using the same beginning to a sentence (e.g. She then/He then/ etc). This can get annoying and distract from your writing. Just something to work on. Good ideas tho'!!

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