All Comments on 'Carmen: Grand Slam'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago
Good stuff

The trashy dialogue is what makes these stories. Good stuff!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago
The boys didn't have much use for her other than

Her asshole. I think they like boys better by the way they treated that girl. I'm suprised that they didn't suck each others cock off after they fucked that girl up the ass.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago

Great story. More tales of Carmen's anal adventures!!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
The writing was piss poor.

I guess it was a good story but the writing, the characters, and most of just, let me put it this way... It's like someone jut wrote this story under their sheets with a flash light without putting any effort or thought into it.

Not to mention how vastly unrealistic it is. It could use some editing and maybe it could go through a few drafts. It reads like a first rough draft.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
The writing was piss poor.

I guess it was a good story but the writing, the characters, and most of just, let me put it this way... It's like someone jut wrote this story under their sheets with a flash light without putting any effort or thought into it.

Not to mention how vastly unrealistic it is. It could use some editing and maybe it could go through a few drafts. It reads like a first rough draft.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
The writing was piss poor.

I guess it was a good story but the writing, the characters, and most of just, let me put it this way... It's like someone jut wrote this story under their sheets with a flash light without putting any effort or thought into it.

Not to mention how vastly unrealistic it is. It could use some editing and maybe it could go through a few drafts. It reads like a first rough draft.

buttcheeks777buttcheeks777over 10 years ago
fantasy

I agree that this was great, pure fantasy. I've had similar fantasies to this as recent as.. two seconds ago.. Most of us write these stories more for ourselves, so for myself and, I'm guessing, countless others to have this same anal use & abuse fantasy must mean something. I almost lost it during my read of this story and I'm looking forward to more of Carmen's adventures.

AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Your writing is shit. Truly.

AnonymousAnonymous6 months ago

Anal rape at best. How many times did she say stop. And 12 inches of rigid wood ? She could have been seriously hurt. What a load of trash.

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