All Comments on 'Witch Hazel'

by greenmountaineer

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AngelineAngelineabout 15 years ago
This has potential

although I don't think it is as well-constructed as your other submission today. There's a lot about it that's really good--some great ironic lines and twisty--funny sex metaphors. That is very good, indeed, because it's hard to write anything erotic in poetry and hit the right note, but your tone works well and is consistent across the poem. Otoh, I think there's stuff that can come out because it isn't really adding anything to the poem, and I don't get the comparison of witch hazel as a better alternative to therapy. Maybe that's a cultural reference of some kind that I'm missing, just my opinon. I hope to read more of you though; you have talent. :-)

tazz317tazz317about 12 years ago
THE LADY STINGER

has not lost her barb. TK U MLJ LV NV

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