by Rehnquist
There were spots, but a really fun read. I just read all the chapters together and really enjoyed. Just continue on with a happy ending
Your story telling ability is obvious and, as is my favorite, I suspect everyone will live happily ever after! In truth ? - I love it!!!!!! But . . . you have done more than that . . . the emotions and the words expressed seemed to me to be realistic. It's a good thing you didn't post this in LW, which you easily could have . . . you'd have the anonymousii (that's more than one for those of you who have no formal Latin training) would be after blood and at least two pounds of flesh. Mechanically you will make it work. Couples plus two singles (Jenny Silverman & Sean). I have truly enjoyed this story and I continue to look forward to the next installment!
but I am not sure that I want Tim to live happily ever after! Elizabeth should grab onto her hope of happiness with more dispatch.
Well it looks like Cynthia and David, check....Sean and Aimeee, check.... Will and Elizabeth, check.....Tim and Jenny, ???????
You are doing well at expressing everyone's emotions, fears, and ability to forgive trangressions. Doing so much better than other writers who don't dare because of the nonny mouses. Screw them! they have ruled this site long enough!
BILLYTHEGER doesn't ever make sense. Elizabeth never cheated on anybody. Maybe he was thinking about Cynthia.
So many emotions in all of the scenes. Beautifully written and artfully expressed. Suspect there's a twist or turn coming. Zipping to 8!
Me thinks you've not spent much time or met many prostitutes. And, yes, escorts are nothing more than prostitutes. Nothing wrong with happy endings on occasion, just not particularly realistic.
Congrats. Great Chapter. Five out of five. On my last comment I hoped some characters would run into a road block to increase the tension in the story. And boom that's exactly what happened to Elizabeth and Will. I might have put the resolution into another chapter to maintain the tension but that is nitpicking. Aimee and Sea could have had a similar problem Sean tells his story about his dying wife, but maybe that would have been too much. Tim's BSDM event surprised me. I thought he was gone, but the author clearly has all the strings weaving together. The description of the next chapter worries me but won't stop me reading. Cheers Steve
I am enjoying the story except for the David and Cynthia relationship. It seems that David is content being a lesser partner. In my opinion successful marriages and relationships are based on equal partnerships. Sure there is give and take, cyclical experiences when one person carries more of the load temporarily, but in this relationship David seems to give most of the time and Cynthia takes and takes.
She screwed up. She had a ongoing affair and contrary to later chapters did it because she didn't love her husband. Instead of dealing with it by talking, counseling, or any number of methods, she decided the best way was to hurt in in the most despicable way a person can hurt their spouse. And then David basically begs her to come back. And then she throws in conditions to them getting back together.
At this point I feel that David should have learned his lesson but hasn't. He is walking into disaster with eyes wide open and I don't feel sorry for him any longer.
Your stories are so well written and your characters so real I feel like im living the story.Please share more of them with us.Your fan PCJ
A cheating whore and an ex prostitute are doing very well. Glad the artist is with a good woman!!!
really beginning to like your main characters although it took 5 chapters to get there. Only one is still a "jerk" is Tim the Cop.