All Comments on 'First DP'

I loved this. The writing could be a bit more polished, but the voice is honest and sincere-- not naive-- just young, uncomplicated lust. I like the menstrual blood, too, not because of a fetish, but just because it makes the whole thing more believable.

Good story - write some more. Chris and Eric are bi so they need to fuck each other - maybe one guy can ass fuck the other while you are being ass fucked. Maybe when Tina and Shawn argue, she can walk out and Shawn can stay for some triple fucking - a Korean girl like your photo impaled on 3 white cocks is a great filthy K-Pop fantasy. Maybe Shawn is nervous about gang fucking and the other three can teach him. In this scenario they can plan and premeditate what they're going to try out - lots of time to describe how they feel, what they taste, how they overcome their fears, when they reach their limits.